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"As they exploded" Musta been painful. I assume it was just a small error, with it and Caption instead of Captain. I'd be alright with Seth, except for him being captain. The other guy, No way jose. Also, the Naming Convention is a Japanese Onomonatopeia said twice usually.
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sorry for the mistakes. there's really no reason for it. I'm going to go back and change Seth's back story a little. I also deleted the Nails Character. being two characters might be pushing it. also, I was thinking of changing the fruit to the Tetsu Tetsu no Mi. it's a a Logia-type Devil Fruit that allows the a person to control, create, and transform into metal at will, turning the user into a Metal Human. I've been researching all types of Devil Fruit. I was hoping that I would expand upon it and make it a sort of liquid metal that the blood stream creates. this way the power isn't over powered and had a draw back where the user can't use as much other wise he risks losing a lot of blood. would that be alright? here is the link I found the Tetsu Tetsu no Mi if you're interested: http://onepiecefanon.wikia.com/wiki/Tetsu_Tetsu_no_Mi