Hily shit,Haleluyah!!
After spending literally 10 minutes thinking about the difference between my,and your writing,I have realized it.It is thar you actually write in present.Actually my lines that are in the present also seem more fluid.I just feel ashamed that it took me so long to realise.I guess I now know the way to get rid of my shitty writing style.I knew it would do good for my book if I RP'd for a while.Thankfully I stumbled into you Flynn.