[quote=@Dirty Dan]
Hello mifune. You may need to add more quality to your CS, attempt to make it more detailed, use a spell-checker, ETC. Also, explain his garrote wire in more detail? How does it form into weaponry? Why would a garrote wire even cut? How does a random gangster re-wire a soldier- actually, why was a fifteen year old, or a guy younger than that, even a soldier? 

Sorry if I'm rambling. Just look over it some more?
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ok i will give it more thought. I was using spell checker. also on the wire wasnt sure what to call it, like that it could cut, didn't feel right to just call it wire and the garrote wire was the only kind i could remember.