[color=f7941d]"I'd suggest getting a car or something, but listening to you guys, I don't think thats a good idea."[/color]

[color=00a651][i]Why would she be worried about that getting a car? Nies must have almost hit her or something[/i] “No worries, I don’t think the Sanctuary is too far away! Besides, I wouldn’t let Nies behind the wheel if we were!” [/color]with a cheeky grin Jukebox grabbed Nies and Static by the hand and led the trio in a direction he thought was to the Sanctuary.

[color=00a651]“Wow, a Healer and Warrior’s hands really do feel different. I always suspected since DGO is so detailed, but I never had the opportunity to prove it before now!”[/color] as he was talking he got a reply message from Arms Slave,

[hider=Arms Slave's message][quote][b]To[/b]: Unrelenting Jukebox
[b]From[/b]: Arms Slave
[b]Subject[/b]: Re:NO SUBJECT

She wholly devoted herself to God. She prayed for the sake of people, and for the happiness of the world... But if God existed, how could this be? 

Here in this outlying church; This place where she aids the weak and preaches the Word of God.

One would not expect the smell of blood, alcohol and dirt. The stink of outlaws. And now... The girl is filled with the stench of their desire... 

The girl's faith flows out with the fluids polluting her womb. [/quote][/hider]

[color=00a651][i]Oh for fuck sake... did he not read my message? Saying creepy shit for the sake of it isn’t really that intimidating! [/i] [/color]

[hider=To Arms Slave][b]To[/b]: Arms Slave

[b]From[/b]: Unrelenting Jukebox

[b]Subject[/b]: Re:NO SUBJECT

Okay, so the creepy church imagery? A bit cliché, but its good you can stick to the classics and have them work to a certain extent. The problem is that you lack pacing. Frankly, you’re too full on. Rollercoaster’s are fun because of ups [i]and[/i] downs. 

You’re currently just a really long shot down with no build up, no tension! People get used to that after a while and it becomes less effective. Learn to mix-up the levels of creepy and you’ll improve in overall quality.

Cheers,
Unrelenting Jukebox[/hider]

Hitting send Jukebox, hearing a boom and a Dissolution’s roar not too far away, stopped in his tracks. [color=00a651][i]Well now, that sounds like EXP calling my name![/i]
“Soooo... you two wouldn’t mind a change of plans and investigating what manner of Dissolution made that, hopefully getting that extra bit of EXP on the way?”[/color] Not waiting for a reply Jukebox let go of his new friends and almost ran towards what he hoped would be sweet, sweet EXP.

[@Lucius Cypher][@Scarifar][@Caits]