[@Pripovednik]Already I can tell you this; 

Numero 1: [b]Every[/b] marine in this RP, except for NCP's, are to be [b]new recruits[/b] - that includes your own.

Numero 2: Rank of Lieutenant Commander? I think not...and, even if he was one in his previous Chapter, it would not matter in the DW as a Black Shield.

Numero 3: Either change the sniper rifle, or change the power sword to something smaller (every marine carries a combat knife, for example). Just because he's a member of the DW doesn't mean he can mix'n'match his weapons without some form of specialisation - in modern spec-ops I imagine a sniper wouldn't then have a secondary SMG, he wouldn't need it, he's a sniper! Same applies here.

That's it, so far...take your time over it, we're not gonna get going until everyones completed their sheets.

Oh, and if anyone would like the DW core rulebook (PDF format), I could probably provide it to them. Just give me a PM.

That is all...as you were!