[quote=@bmxbrat484] Using notepad because my browser is a big pooper... [hider=Quaa..?] Name: Nyx Height/Weight: 5'6"/140lbs Age: 23 [Hider=Appearance:] [Img]http://candimere.files.wordpress.com/2011/04/anime-cooking1.jpg[/img] [/hider] Personality: Being an only child, Nyx had to keep herself entertained when her parents weren't around. That caused her to become adventurous and have a thirst for knowledge. She can be over dramatic at times, border lining neurotic, but for the most part she is upbeat. Her main flaw is her impulsive, reckless decision-making-skills, caused by her impatience. Despite her being a risk-taker, Nyx has a constant paranoia due to her partial-deafness, and is constantly looking over her shoulder. Quirks: Nyx has and annoying habit of clicking her tongue when she's waiting for something, along with an overall fidgety nature. Home Island/Sea: East Blue History: Nyx isn't sure where she hails from, all she knows is she was found in a lifeboat with three others aboard the same ship when it went down. Her adoptive father and his crew came across the survivors while trawling, and the only one conscious told him that they were attacked while crossing the East Blue. By what, or whom, is unclear, as all three men were pronounced dead by the time they reached land. Nyx was diagnosed with Scarlett Fever shortly after being taken in by her new family, but she pulled through, although suffering permanent damage to her hearing. She grew up on a small island, out of the way from pretty much anything, so life was pretty dull. She worked with her adoptive mother as a cook, and sometimes with her fisherman of a dad, until she was 17 and a position opened up on a merchant ship for a chef. Her parents supported her decision to leave, knowing that adventure was something Nyx had always fantasized about. She keeps a picture of them in her pocket watch, and vows to return once she's seen every corner of the four seas. Fighting style: Nyx is proficient in Dambe, as her father and his crew taught Nyx how to fend for herself. With weapons, she prefers small blades a foot or shorter in length. She uses her culinary knowledge to concoct poisons, and is also a bit of a pyrotechnic. Ship Positions: Chef Bounty: 0 [/hider] [/quote] Looks like you are missing just a few little things from the CS but nothing substantial. To clarify you do not have a Devil Fruit yes? If I understand it correctly the character gets my [img]http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8509/8499889901_f81fc65d25.jpg[/img][quote=@Ira] [hider=Enter M A R X O ][center][b][h2][color=blue]Marxo St. Laurant[/color][/h2][/b] [color=blue][i]Appearance[/i][/color]: [IMG]http://i58.tinypic.com/s0wqza.jpg[/IMG] [color=blue][i]Height/Weight[/i][/color]: 6’1, 160lbs [color=blue][i]Age[/i][/color]:19 [color=blue][i]Personality[/i][/color]: Marxo is quite calm and collected. He tends to speak in a very collective manner. Even in dire situation, he is always the one to keep his cool. He thinks it would better help the situation if he acts this way. It is often hard to make him made but not impossible. The most two major things that upset him are being turned down by females and running out of smokes. Other than that he remains almost monotone, from his voice, personality, and mindset. His persona is due to his past. Its almost like he has a split personality . His other half is a maniacal , senseless man with no disregard to human kind. His only interest in that time is seeing everything colored red with the blood of this enemies. [color=blue][i]Home Island/Sea[/i][/color]: St Laurants’ Isle,South Blue [color=blue][i]History[/i][/color]: Marxo was born in the East Blue . His family had traveled to the South almost immediately after he was born. They settled on a deserted island and used the wildlife to live off of. His mother happened to be a master chef but not one of legend and lore. His father on the other hand was a hunter so this made the couple well adept to their surrounding. Within the first three years of Marxo’s life his parents had already tamed the island and renamed the newly cultivated place St. Laurant’s isle after his family. At 7 he was taught how to hunt alongside his father. it seem to come naturally to the boy. his first catch was a friendly panda shark whom his father told him to release back into the sea. After all his mother had no use for such meat. At the age of 14 ,he met his first neighbors. They had also traveled from an island off in the distance. From first sight they seemed like nice people, but eventually more unwelcomes began to turn up. Marxo saw this as a good thing but his parents knew better. They decided to establish a hierarchy with Marxo’s family heading the pack. This was agreeable since they were the first one aboard the island, but one family had different plans. They wanted the St. Laurant’s lifestyle , or better yet their lives. So one day the cooked up a scheme to take out this new head family. Since the St. Laurants’ did all of the hunting and cooking the other family decided that taking the load off of them for a day would be the best way to trick the family. It seemed like a convenience to Marxo and his family so they gladly accepted the invitation. The other would hunt and prepare a monstrous feast for the now,small village and the heads of the village but inside of the meals that they could would be either sleeping or paralyzing powder. On the night Marxo was turning 15 . He could never forget this night. It would be forever burned into his mind. His parents had been gutted like fishes in front of his very eyes. They had received the sleeping powder while he the paralyzing one. He knew they never stood a chance but he begged and pleaded with the other family. They just smiled and kept cutting till his parents resembled carved turkey. He knew he’d be next. Just as they made their way towards him , the powder began to wear off. He could feel the blood rushing in his hands, then to his arms , and legs. Next came the pain. Tears swelled up in his eyes , as he continued to play helpless. As soon as the family made its move he’d destroy them. The father began to untie his hands. The moment he felt free he took the chair his was once sitting in and slammed it across the man’s face. He then picked up a piece of broken wood the chair and ran it like a dagger straight thru his heart. He stared at the other two women with soul-less eyes. [color=blue]“Your next.”,[/color] he exclaimed as he rushed towards them both with the same piece of wood he’d taken the man out with previously. He stabbed the women repeatedly until he was satisfied and passed out from exhaustion. A few hours later he awoke to find himself on a slave tradeship, along with his fellow neighbors. The boat was headed for the east blue. He would spend the next 2 years as a cook aboard a floating restaurant in the sea until his killer mentality got the best of him and he slayed the entire crew. Before deserting the emptied cafe he’d stumbled upon an odd fruit. Upon eating the fruit his body began to turn into shadows. He later came to find out it was the “Yami Yami no Mi” fruit. For the next two years he trained and study everything he could find about the fruit .He truly wants to learn how to fully control the fruit and manipulate it to help him become a pirate. [color=blue][i]Fruit[/i][/color]: The Yami Yami no Mi is a Logia-type Devil Fruit that allows the user to create and control darkness at will, making the user a Darkness Human (闇人間 Yami Ningen).[Hider=Yami Yami no Mi link][url]http://onepiece.wikia.com/wiki/Yami_Yami_no_Mi[/url][/hider] -Gravity Control -Nullifies other devil fruit powers.(time limit 2 posts) -Creates black holes [color=blue][i]Fighting style[/i][/color]: Jeet Kune Do(Wing Chun)- not fixed or patterned, and is a philosophy with guiding thoughts. It was named for the Wing Chun concept of interception or attacking while one's opponent is about to attack. Jeet Kune Do practitioners believe in minimal movements with maximum effects and extreme speed. The system works by using different "tools" for different situations, where the situations are divided into ranges, which are kicking, punching, trapping, and grappling, where martial artists use techniques to flow smoothly between them. Ship Position: Tba. Bounty: 0. [/center][/hider] [/quote] I like the character overall but I don't think that I can write off the Yami-yami no mi. If you want a different devil fruit or none at all it should be fine. That is the only portion that I will have to have you edit. [quote=@Renny] [Hider=Nabil Valley][center] [img]http://i.imgur.com/jWiLkIl.jpg[/img] [h3][i][b] “I[/b]t’s kinda like talking to a wall isn’t it. Seeing as I give no fucks.”[/i][/h3][/center] [b]Name:[/b] Nabil "The Calm" Valley [b]Height/Weight:[/b] 5’9” / 142lbs [b]Age:[/b] 18 [hider=Personality] The alias “The Calm” was given to Nabil due to his infallible ability to seem un-phased by most antagonist. Some assume that he hides an intelligence behind this composed wall. Those are lies. He is as smart as the next man, maybe a bit more so, but that’s mainly due to his innate caution. He knows when to shut his mouth and when to speak out against others. In that aspect, he travels in a gray area. Where one person’s reality is not his own, but instead an adjacent to what could have been. In other words, he attempts to empathize with others. His love for the sea is directly tied to his extensive love for freedom, which contradicts his abnormal caution.[/hider] [b]Home Island/Sea:[/b] Provestal Island. [hider=History] The son of two Marines, it was very unlikely that Nabil would later become a pirate. In fact, his parent’s loving nature left little to be desired. When the two were deployed, expecting to be gone for several years, he was sent to live with distant relatives on Provestal Island. A quaint, small place where a unnerving calm saturated the air. On the island he explored the deep woods that surrounded the small town. Finding interest in the giant wild life and floral. He couldn’t understand it for the longest, unwilling to show his ignorance he would remain that way for several months. When he finally asked his aunt and cousin, they explained that the oxygen levels on the island was abnormally high. He took those words to face value and continued finish his breakfast, a rather calm fascination now inside of him. By the age of thirteen, Nabil had seemingly become the living force of Provestal Isle’s calm. Though many had resided on the isle, not many could match his level of tranquil. When others were too afraid to enter the force, he would walk through the greenery, alongside the giant beasts, and gaze at the crater in its center. Every day he returned there, he felt the urge to delve inside grow stronger. It was like the sound of the careening waterfall hitting the dark bottom was a calling card. It beckoned for him to adventure below but caution staid his descent. At the age of fifteen, Provestal Isle was visited by a band of pirates. They washed ashore on a broken and shattered boat, the captain deeply worried about his crew. The island offered them shelter for three nights. Those three nights were filled with stories of stormy adventures and fanciful tales of the unnatural. Needless to say, Nabil was enticed by them. On the fourth night, the Marines surrounded the isle with a fleet of ranked officers. The Pirate Captain, who expressed his desire to not tangle the island up in his affairs had decided to give himself up. He left with his crew moments later. An hour had peacefully passed before cannon fire had begun to rain down. A scarce group of the pirates returned in tears, warning that the marines was going to kill them all, despite their surrender. Behind them, the marines trampled forward. Nabil and his cousin, along with others, were told to retreat to the forest. To let the beasts protect them as a last resort. As Nabil guided his cousin to the crater, he could hear the cries of villagers as some of the beasts prowled on them. Dark smoke soon billowed from the tree line, orange heat lined its treetops. Nabil believed his cousin and himself to be safe. That was until canon fire came dangerously close to them. Fear led him to trying to convince his cousin to dive into the crater with him; the promise of water below was not enough though. The boy, who was supposed to jump on three with him, had stayed on top, where canon fire had seared his face and tossed him out of sight. At the bottom of the cavern spring, Nabil immediately swore vengeance on the Marines. He followed the water to the mouth of the island, one that led out into the ocean. Once he returned back to the shore, he witnessed the pirate captain shackled and ready to be inhumanly executed. Nabil realized that the majority of the Marines had left during his long stay in the cavern and that only a few was left. He would have heroically saved the guy, if he had been so afraid. He was shot several times in the head before finally being left alone. Nabil waited until nightfall, when the sea was quiet and empty till he finally approached. The captain was dead but the beach was littered with members of his crew. As Nabil walked through, a bloodied hand grabbed him and instructed, with vexation in his voice, to avenge them. With that in mind, he told Nabil the location of a treasure near the inn in the village. The village was burned to the ground and Nabil had all but given up hope on finding anyone alive. They all had bullets in them, one for each alive he figured. Once to the treasure chest, he found a fruit inside. He bit it after a bit of hesitance and after spitting it out, found out it was a devil fruit. He became a 10,000 degrees human. Years later and he had become a pirate, one hell bent on getting in the marines way. Usually his actions were small, intervening with rookie marines in small towns and allowing the escape of other pirates. Though recently he hijacked a marine ship and sailed it to Reverse Mountain.[/hider] [b]Devil Fruit:[/b] [url=http://onepiece.wikia.com/wiki/Atsu_Atsu_no_Mi] Atsu Atsu no Mi ([i]Hot Hot Fruit[/i])[/url] [b]Fighting style:[/b] Direct and brutish, Nabil fights in conjunction with his Hot Hot Fruit abilities. Landing searing blows and burning away those that stand in his way. He seems to know some form of martial arts, as he often lowers into a stance when fighting one on one. With all the potential of a Supenova. Nabil has the possibility to use Observation Haki, Arms Haki, and [i]Conquerors[/i] Haki. Though these have not been explored and largely unseen. He will need immense training to bring these out of himself. [b]Ship Positions:[/b] - [b]Bounty:[/b] – I'll let you decided. Nabil has hijacked a ship and intervened in several Marine arrests. [/hider] [/quote] Is he always hot? Or is it a paramedium style fruit that allows him to create high temperatures at will? Can he only do it in his own body or can he transfer the heat? And I cannot write off on the conqueror's haki. Not even the captain has this ability. Perhaps later on in the rp some people may develop it but for now that is going to be a no on that haki power.