[center][b]Report typos or problems/criticism so I can progress my skill.[/b]

First time roleplaying so I suppose we should just get in this
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[color=lightcoral] Jane: 
"Come on [@_______], the party’s starting. We have to go now." [/color]

As you place your final boot on you exit your quaint town-home. With a black suit, white boots and a cowboy hat Clint Eastwood would be jealous of, you strut into the driver's side of your jeep with a smirk on your face unable to hold in your enthusiasm for the party. Pulling out of your driveway the wind pushes and pulls on your face as you speed past a sign towards the old Blakewood manor. 

[color=lightcoral] Jane:
"Can you feel it [@_____], *inhales* it feels like a good time."  [/color]


Pulling up to Blakewood Manor, you spot a shadow at through an upstairs window. It was surprising, as the party was restricted to downstairs only but.pulling up into Josh's driveway Jane quickly runs out into the home to meet up with Tammy as you stare into your front mirror checking yourself before entering.

[color=gray] *Gasp!* [/color]

The sound of the crowd amassed the surrounding area drowning you in shock. You run into the building to be drawn in by the sight of a crowd surrounding the stairs. Pushing and passing your way up you’re greeted by the sight of Tammy’s dead body hanging statically by a rope inside Josh's grand bathroom.

 [color=MediumVioletRed] “Wooo! Party!” [/color]

A voice could be heard saying downstairs, followed by a smack of the front door and a scream by the Blakewoods. 

[color=Orange] Josh: 
"Are you crazy, these doors are hundreds of years old, you’re gonna harm the hinges and they’re rusted as is." [/color]

People gather around as a fight ensued between Josh and a drunky downstairs while you stayed in confusion and checked the body of Tammy with your girlfriend staring above in horror.

[color=lightcoral] Jane: 
"Why aren’t people doing anything" [/color]


[color=blue]"She’s fine it’s become normal I suppose, she seems to do it every week. Erotic asphyxiation, she passes out, we get alarmed, police come and check her pulse, she’s fine. It’s gotten to the point where cops don’t even come on these calls anymore. Sorry for barging in on your conversation. I’m Donny Blakewood, her brother." [/color]

[color=lightcoral] Jane: 
"I thought that was just some mean rumor from Shay and his gang." [/color]

[backstory sequence]
Tammy and Jane were never really popular per se, but they never had to face bullies on a day to day basis, but a month ago things became worse. Shay a guy Tammy had been seeing started spreading the rumor that he had deflowered her. Angered, they broke up and Shay, in an effort to humiliate her for vengeance, spread what Jane believed was a rumor. Tammy lost all respect from her peers the following days, all but Jane.
[/backstory sequence]

You check her pulse but something’s wrong, it’s faint as if fading away with the pace of her breathing and you begin to feel off about trusting Donny as Josh had never talked much about a younger brother.

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Do you 
1) Go down stairs and confirm this with Josh    
[color=Red] main cons: negative opinion from Donny [/color] 
2) trust that her brother knows what he’s talking about.   
[color=Red] main cons: no short term problems [/color] [/center]