Alright I see what you mean, I will make sure to edit it and make it better. 

Though as to going more desrciptive of when she learned something important, I was trying to be a bit vague on that as I figured the most important part of her history would be when our character's met and their small history they would have together. That is what I was going to focus most of my time on coming up with.

For the descriptiveness and everything though I will get on it now to make it better.