Some feedback for you folks...

[@Zombehs] Concerning Jorak Tenumbra... We already spoke via the interest check and I can see that you added the location for Jorak's hometown on the map, so thanks for that. Nothing new to report about Jorak's CS-- looks good! 

[@Scrapula] Concerning Leon Alabaster... He'll be able to indulge in his love for loincloths much more outside the desert (although I can't guarantee he might get strange looks if he walks around the marketplace in such attire). We already discussed this in the interest check. Thanks for making that edit. 

[@Undine] Concerning Raine Laiken... We already spoke via the interest check. Everything looks good. 

[@Captain Jenno] Concerning Brande Ashbell... Everything looks good except it seems that he's just recently discovered his ability and he's 24. He should have discovered it about 7 years ago. Other than that, you're golden. 

[@Dynamo Frokane] Concerning Vessa Fairwraith... There seems to be a bit of an inconsistency in Vessa's backstory. If Vessas father raped her mother on one of the escape ships from Xavier, that would make Vessa over 50 years old (as nobody has been know to live in Xavier since the war 60 years ago). Perhaps he could have been on a ship escaping from a southern town on the south-eastern side of the mountains that was being pillaged by orcs from the Realm of Spiritus Raptor? Escaping to Inisad? Also, her powers would have awakened shortly after/the day of her 17th birthday as opposed to just before her 18th. Other than that, everything looks fine. 

[@McHaggis] Concerning Elspeth Scout... Everything looks great. The only note I might add-- and this doesn't necessarily merit a change at all-- is that Xaviar is a largely uninhabited town and quite dangerous. If her father was a pirate and wished to venture there via boat, he would need to cross the Crimson Sea to the east. It's possible he could make it through by hugging the coast, but it would still be very dangerous. 

[@NightFlight] Concerning Audra Hesten... We already spoke via the interest check. There's just one more edit I would recommend-- could you add a break somewhere in the first paragraph of her biography so it's a little less of a wall? It just makes it easier to read without getting lost (for me at least). 

[@Crazy Doctor] Concerning Kayla Halogi... We already spoke via PM-- thanks for making the requested changes. You put her town name down as "Jeorvan" when I think you meant to put "Jeorvo". There's also just one more edit I would recommend-- could you add a break somewhere in her biography so it's a little less of a wall? It just makes it easier to read without getting lost (for me at least). Other than that, everything looks good. 

[@Jay Kalton] Concerning Aleta Stormcrest... Character sheet looks good. The only thing that's missing is her discovering her powers when she turned 17, since she's 19 she would have had them for about 2 or 3 years now. 

[@BubbleGumKing] Concerning Adrian Murray... I won't ask you to change the character's gender. I realize it's still a work in progress-- but just to make sure-- I see that you ended on discussing his 17th birthday but there's no mention of his awakening powers. I'm sure you probably have plans to get to it, but I just wanted to make sure it's clear that including that information is a requirement.  Also-- just for consistency's sake, can you please use the character sheet skeleton I created? Namely in reference to the Personality/Nature section.