[@Crimson Raven] Concerning Ark... There are a few changes I would recommend. Firstly, could you elaborate a little more on Ark's appearance? Most notably, are there differences to note from the picture used or does he look [i]exactly [/i]like that? Also, what is he known to wear when he's not decked out in bright red and gold battle gear? Or is that all he ever wears and he's just not one to wear casual clothes? 

With Ark's nature, it seems he has a few contradictory character traits that could use a bit more explaining. He is described as being cynical and apathetic, but also thoughtful, kind, and loyal. The very definition of the word apathetic is "showing or feeling no interest, enthusiasm, or concern"-- so it doesn't make much sense. Is he kind and thoughtful on the outside, but apathetic and cynical on the inside or vice versa? As it stands now, I just feel like I don't understand what kind of person he is. I understand that he's someone with a lot of patience who tends to bottle up his feelings and that he's extremely stubborn and fearless and loves the violence of combat. Does this cause him to act aggressively with others or does he do a complete 180 when he's not dealing with enemies? Also, I would be very interested to know what kind of affect his extremely traumatic past has had on his character.

With his backstory, I might tone down the emphasis on how cold the North is. It's a fairly large country, but not a world map. I suppose you could say it's colder up there, but not anywhere close to a frozen tundra. I'm also a bit confused about what happened with the bandits that bound, blindfolded, and gagged Ark. Why would they return him to his father rather than just kill him like most bandits? Does Ark ever plan on going back for his mother? 

I would also recommend clarifying where the fire came from when Ark discovered his powers during the attack as it seems like he generated a great deal of fire with the way it is now. Were the creeps setting the camp on fire and that's where it came from? Also, with the location being so close to Frel, it wouldn't make sense for that many orcs and the like to be there. Frel is located far away from Spiritus Raptor, so to see that many creeps so far away from there would be very uncommon. It would make more sense for them to be close to Vevian, Jeorvo, or Periset when the attack occurred. Also, could you add a break somewhere in the third paragraph of his biography so it's a little less of a wall? It just makes it easier to read without getting lost (for me at least). 

There are also quite a few typos I would suggest spell checking before the deadline. Other than what's been mentioned, everything looks good, though.