[@Nerevarine] Everything looks great. I recommend though you change your telepathy power to something stronger.

Use http://powerlisting.wikia.com/ and search for a power there.

For example you can search 'Mental Powers' and it will give you all mental based powers such as psychic and pyrokinesis. You don't have to edit, but it would be a good idea. You are accepted and can put your character in the character section.