[@tsukune] I have a few problems with Shizuka, which I'll detail below:

[quote]He has a generally pale complexion, but develops a slight tan from playing ball games outside with his peers.[/quote]


I can't really envision this... Like, pale and tan (even if it's slight) are opposites. Two different ends of the spectrum. And you're saying that he's both. lol

Could be better described.


[quote]Under this mundane facade he isn't as innocent as he seemed - a closet sadist who is rarely sympathetic and secretly enjoys watching people writhing in agony, but he does not purposely inflict damage on others unless it's out of self-defense (or for his precious brother). [/quote]


Yeah, I still have problems with a 17-year old sadist. It's just... eh.


[quote] if one is able to get past the protective wall he has drawn around himself and gain his trust, he might return the favor with an unwavering loyalty...[/quote]

This is a little pet peeve of mine. Since... it pretty much applies to [i]everyone[/i].


[quote]Limits/Weaknesses/Drawbacks:
Phasing Limitations
Shizuka is unable to breathe while he's passing through the object (i.e. walking through walls), he can only phase continuously for as long as he can hold his breath.
The denser the material is, the harder and slower for him to pass through. Forcing himself to phase through objects of higher density can cause him undesirable pain.
Solidifying while in an object or switching off his ability before he has passed through the object can inflict serious injury - worse, death.[/quote]


I think the power could use some actual weaknesses. These are more of limits (In fact, I don't know why you merged the limits with the weaknesses/drawbacks because they're two different things). I can come up with something, but it's a lil' late.


[quote]Solidifying while in an object or switching off his ability before he has passed through the object can inflict serious injury - worse, death.[/quote]


Not trying to be a dick, but I doubt this is going to come into play.


Haruka is fine, but Shizuka needs some work.