Alright, so, [@Eklispe], you apparently didn't understand what we said. Our main issue isn't with how powerful Jor is (though it [i]is[/i] an issue), it's that he lacks cohesion as a character. He basically resembles the prototypical munchkin/minmaxer character, only completely lacking in self-awareness. You yourself have created a ridiculously-designed character built to exploit a particular concept to the maximum extent possible, but seem completely unaware of it. If your intention was to create "a tongue-in-cheek reference to absurdly optimized RPG builds," we could accept that, but as it stands your character is only "the ultimate dude that is awesome and unbeatable."

Take note of how many skills and abilities you've written that say things like "total immunity," or "perfect defense," or "100% resistance" or even "removed everything but..." (I'm paraphrasing), and then compare that quantity to each other character. See a staggering difference? I sure do. Not to mention his absurd stat total of over 800, including his special stat which still shouldn't be over 100.

What also bugs me is the lack of thought put into the backstory. There was a perfect opportunity to work the guild deeply into Jor's backstory, but instead it was tacked on as an afterthought.

Iladar is not quite as bad but still has some glaring issues. First of all, her summoing spells need to be reduced by a few orders of magnitude. Ainz in the anime had levels as a dedicated summoner class, but never had more than two or three minions. You should probably be topping out around ten or twenty for your top-level skills. Also, it doesn't stand to reason that Jor would create an NPC to "help with girls," as YGGDRASIL did not afford actual sapience to NPCs during its activity, and any personality they may have possessed would be limited to a text box describing them.

Basically an itinerary that will help immensely: watch the anime (you'll get an idea of what player characters should actually be like quite quickly), look over the other (accepted) characters, and conceptualize your character as a [i]character[/i], not a list of powers and skills.

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Quick question, my guy is a human but I was told to change the text to yellow, when it says humans are blue? Sorta confused, am I like a different human from the new worlds humans or something else? Am I missing something?
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Honestly, I'm as confused as you are. Good question for Turbo tomorrow afternoon.