[quote=@Dead Cruiser]My issues [@yoshua171] are basically thus:
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As I have mentioned previously, I find his powers to be needlessly complex, and could easily be distilled into a concept far more intuitive and less reliant on [b]walls of text[/b] to explain.

Also, the "limitations" on the sword and the mind-rending are basically "pacifism," which aren't really limitations at all. Your character can and has previously used these abilities on people with almost no provocation, with nearly nothing that can be done to stop him.

You also didn't address the character's biography, which I also find kind of absurd and nonsensical. It doesn't read to me like a legend or historical account as much as it reads like, "these are the things that happened so this character could possibly exist."[/quote]
I offered to write a summary, Raven just said either remove the titles and call it some name similar to soul magic or whatnot. I called it Invocation as that is the form of the magic, kept the titles, and put it in a hider titled as the aforementioned. Seeing as he has accepted that, it must be alright.

I went into specifics to avoid his abilities being pegged as "powerful with no weaknesses". I accept your criticism, but I don't think I'll be rewriting those abilities. The closest I may do is write a summary.

As to the limitations on Mind Rend, your assessment is inaccurate. The two primary downsides of the ability are as follow:

>It drains the user's sanity (which causes a feedback loop forcing him to gather more spirits and energy and to feed on them to maintain himself, which is bad in a more long term sort of way).

>It requires four times the energy to rend a mind. It's a 4:1 ratio and the implication is that minds already possess a lot of their own energy. So gathering 4 times that energy and then considering that Lyr would also willingly have to decide to sacrifice a portion of his sanity and mental well being is kind of a big deal. I mentioned his pacifism as an additional point, not as the primary weakness.