[quote=@Altered Tundra] Not bad overall, but a couple of things: -More detail on the following sections: [list][*]Personality [list][*]If you could, explain some more about how she is with each trait. Or at least extend it to 1-2 more paragraphs.[/list] [*]Bio [list][*]Same for powers here, but just explain her life out a bit more. The bio section needs to be two paragraphs, anyways.[/list] [*]Godly powers [list][*]For the powers, I want it to have some explanation of what she can or can't do. Like, how much fire can she manipulate? How much control does she have over it? Can she create fire or can she only manipulate already existing fire? What can she manipulate it in to? Like, can she form blasts, constructs and the like? If so, how large/small are they and how long can they stay active until time takes its toll? [*]For the high temperatures ability, I need a range of how hot is too hot for her. I get that she's Hephaestus' daughter, but there must be a temperature where it's just too hot for her. Even if nothing, I need some kind of explanation there. [*]As for the fire eyes, how far in the dark can she see? Is there a limit of how far ahead of her she can see? Also, can she make out things that are naturally invisible in the dark, such as a chameleon or those with the power of invisibility? Also, I need a decent explanation of how she turns it on/off.[/list] [/list] Fix what I mentioned and she's accepted. [/quote] okay.