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so here is the official blurb for the second lived in case you wanna tweak some stuff in terms of race:

[color=yellow]The second lived are the children of Thotafus the Abuser of the Arcane. These beings are souls which have been returned to bodies of living metal. They were traditionally called The Second Lived but now carry the nickname Soulshells. It is not known how many soulshells actually exist but their average lifespan is 1500 to 2000 years. Upon death their soul is returned to a new body by Thotafus. The Than’toralan never remember their past lives. Possesing of Unnatural or Potent will. Many of the Than’toralan have slowly upgraded their bodies over the course of their lives and many sport large collections of potent enhancements and weapons.[/color]

Okay things that may need to be tweaked slightly:

This is the blurb for Yishreenok Galendar's God of the dead. So I think I included this in the opening post but sometimes Gods are worshiped in different forms. Im okay with Xerin being a form of Yishreenok. Just so wer're on the same page though because I have 12 gods for Galendar and they are the only ones. Any variation in God names or appearance or even occasionally power is okay for specific gods that a character worships, but they ARE the same god and I'm only excepting those 12 gods. 

[color=yellow]Yishreenok is the incarnation of death, decay and disease. Yishreenok is said to guard the world of the dead against intrusion by those who would treat with them. Those Yishreenok has made pacts with are the most powerful Necromancer’s the known world has seen. 

Yishreenok is also the guide for those who depart the living world and pass over into the beyond. While The Keeper of the Dead is evil by nature it is not malevolent for the sake of evil, it is a necessary evil beyond the understanding of mortals.[/color]


As far as magic and tech goes I'm basically okay with everything however I do believe Grin and Wind Wild need to look at things and they may be asking you for some expansion or changes. Go ahead and adjust that for them if they do.

Last thing. So I'm okay with you doing a Second Lived that is not the child of Thotafus. it opens up a lot of questions about why Yishreenok would be creating Second Lived beings. So that part im good with because it makes a really interesting potential for plot

Other than that finish cleaning it up, edit for Grin and Wind Wild when they review it and you should be good to go