[quote=@Cultural Titan]
[@Frengo]

So problem in the first sentence. It has only been Galuntrung keep for twentyish years. Before that it was a full castle. However the way its written, it makes it seem like its just the one structure for the whole time. I know you refer to it as a castle later, but I'm just going to mention everything. This also causes a problem with the third paragraph as there would be little time between the castle's fall and Kalar taking it over. However if we want to create more of a time gap there then I think we can work something out.

The King did come to help. Just not until after the Stein family was down to just Raven and the castle was destroyed. The way it is there though it reads as if he never came at all.

That's about it.
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So I didn't do too bad then.

 The first error is a more related to how I wrote and can be fixed easily, the second problem is due to me thinking Raven was really old as his age was "?", and third problem was me misunderstanding what you meant by the King marching for his own glory - I thought you meant he took his time getting there, because he didn't like the Steins and wanted them to die so they didn't end up taking the spotlight in any victorious outcome, as opposed to racing out to save them.

So how old is Raven? How long ago since Galuntrung Castle got wrecked? It matters very little to me, I just thought it happened a long time ago. The more information you can provide, the more accurately I can colour in your world for you :)

Unless the information is already there, and I am just a moronic tool that can't read properly... which is perfectly possible. I have been known to be stupid, on many occasions. 

Alternatively, you're more than welcome to do the lore on the keep, if you would be more comfortable with that. I was just trying to lighten your load a little.