[quote=@Undine] Okay, a few things: If you could write in a quote underneath the picture, that would be lovely. You have an unfinished thought under occupation, and I'd love to know what he wants to be like. Could you add just a few more details to the appearance section? It's mostly just eye color that it's missing. Under the personality section, you forgot to fix Jason to Oliver--from the Manhattan roleplay, if I recall correctly. Right now it reads "Jason seems to almost need to have new relationships." While I don't doubt that Oliver is a bit hesitant to come out to his family because it can be an extremely scary thing, you mentioned that "Men which would be a bit of a no-no for his family". That's not quite true. If you recall, his older brother Gabriel is openly gay. When Gabriel was 17 and Oliver was 7, Gabriel had come home all bruised and battered and told everyone that he had been bullied for being gay. Oliver would've been old enough to recall this happening and know that his parents didn't have a problem with him liking men. In fact, Reginald and Cassiopeia are advocates for LGBT rights. It's likely that their children would know that as well. [/quote] Dang it. I knew I was missing something. That's what I get for doing all my stuff while tired after work. I'll do it all after work. Didn't know about the parents things. Also what Jason? Hah. Not like I heavily modified this sheet... EDIT: It is done!