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I would love to read it over, but what kind of critiquing are you looking for?

And... here are some questions, since the OP doesn't have a ton to go by...
-Would it be possible for Catalina to have a car, albeit an old one?
-Is the group meeting all at once, already together, or a mix?
-Where is the group (state, region, country, etc)?

-Do you want me to make up some graphics for the RP?

I'll stay out of the advanced vs casual debate, except to say this: I STARTED rping in advanced, and have been at it for several years now. I am coming to this forum BECAUSE of the casual, as it's something that can be written relatively speedily (with quality, of course) yet still give me that rush from reading other posts, which will be coming faster due to the casual nature. Not that I am dropping advanced styled writing, this is just a nice relaxant. Like a chef making a sandwich instead of a three course meal.
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Whatever needs to be said about it really. My writing has some improvement to go though, I just can't pinpoint all my own shortcomings all the time myself. 

The OP has enough to go by, and if you follow the outline you know what you don't have :)

1) No she may not. All weaponry, supplies and vehicles are in a group inventory to be set up as of yet. 
2) If you missed this then you weren't reading it. 
3) Montana