I fixed it anyway, because I'm a great person. That and for some reason you're barely reachable. Review is in [color=39b54a]green[/color]. You can remove my retarded comments when taking this. [hider=Haiyū Chikamatsu] [center][img]http://i.imgur.com/yIuoPFr.png[/img] [i]“One last performance before the curtain falls, eh?”[/i] [color=39b54a]bet he says that with that confident smug grin, and then dies to main antagonist[/color] [b]He wears a usually wears a a black fitted body suit that stretches from his neck down to his thighs. Over this he typically wears a tan overcoat with a black in-seam and a pocket on each side, a dark blue pants, and training bandages on his lower legs. Koinu is normally stored away in the overcoat for quick retrieval. As a Red Sage, Haiyū dons a black kuroko uniform and a Noh mask, wholly playing into his role as the "director" of his many assignments. The outfit hides his face and body, keeping his cover secure against Hamajō Confederation agents. Hebi can be found on his arm, in the form of a tight wooden guard.[/b][/center] [hr] [u][b]Personnel files.[/b][/u] [i]Access only by security personnel with a C3 clearance.[/i] [indent]【[U]Full Name[/U]】 [I]Haiyū Chikamatsu[/I] [color=39b54a]Sasori 2.0[/color] 【[U]Alias[/U]】 [i]Toybox[/i] [color=39b54a]speshul indeed[/color] 【[U]Affiliation[/U]】 [i]Undecided - Double Agent for the Red Sages[/i] [color=39b54a]Yeah, be aware the death toll is massive if you want to pull a stunt like that. Especially if the guy has family. You've been warned.[/color] 【[U]Age[/U]】 [i]22[/i] 【[U]Sex[/U]】 [i]Male[/i] 【[U]Sexuality[/U]】 [i]Heterosexual[/i] [color=39b54a]sure buddy[/color] 【[U]Birthplace[/U]】 [i]Sunakagure[/i] [color=39b54a]I like[/color] 【[U]Bloodline/Clan[/U]】 [i]Chikamatsu[/i] 【[U]Rank[/U]】 [i]Chūnin[/i][/indent] [u][b]Psych. report.[/b][/u] [i]Medical secrecy applies.[/i] [indent]【[U]Personality[/U]】 [i]Haiyū is quiet and insightful, if a bit hard around the edges when dealing with others [color=39b54a]I'm already smelling the barbecue sauce-ke from France[/color]. He lives at a distance, observing individuals and ideas without getting directly involved so that he could fully understand them [color=39b54a]sniff sniff mmmm[/color]. Although this approach prevented him from becoming close with many people, it enabled him to think and act without prejudice or preconceptions, instead evaluating things strictly on their own merits. It is obvious that Haiyū possesses a very sharp and attentive mind in regards to engineering and machinery, especially those pertaining to puppetry. He cares deeply for the children in his clan, especially his younger brother, and is willing to do whatever is necessary to protect him [color=39b54a]itachi having some sauce too?[/color]. And, despite his rather gruff attitude, many of Haiyū's actions reveal that he is very close to his younger sister and cousins. All in all, the puppeteer remains fiercely loyal to his clan and has great pride in it. [color=39b54a]I'll have some sauce too[/color] Despite his personality quirks, Haiyū has a strong commitment to his mission, putting his own well-being well below the end goal, often choosing to face threats alone in order to buy time for his allies to escape or for backup to arrive [color=39b54a]and now I know he won't live very long + needs moar sauce-ke[/color], especially displaying a dry sense of humour in the most stressful situations [color=39b54a]harhar[/color][/i] 【[U]History[/U]】 [i]All childhoods are happy [color=39b54a]unless it's naruto rp[/color]. In one way or another, every man and woman look back on their childhoods in fondness. In childhood, the audience is taking their seats. The audience does not matter. Only what happens when the curtain rises matters. [color=39b54a]3deep5me[/color] When a play is performed by two different houses, does it matter who the actors are so long as the story is the same? [color=39b54a]idk, tell me senpai[/color] When his parents died [color=39b54a]oh boy, another BAAAAWWWWW here[/color] on a mission for the Confederation, Haiyū Chikamatsu did not think so. He was simply apart of the same cycle that had repeated itself for the past twenty-generations. With his cousins, Hakurankai and Myūjikaru, the Chunin had suddenly become the breadwinner for his family. A family that consister of two siblings who were to young to fully know what had happened. A gaggle of younger cousins who saw him as father. [color=39b54a]too many cousins in a japanese universe. yeah[/color] With money tight after the death of Hakurankai and Myūjikaru on what was suppose to be a routine mission, Haiyū found himself desperate, opting for more dangerous missions to make ends meet [color=39b54a]my name is haiyu, and this is jackass[/color]. After years of missions, barely scraping by in his duties as a shinobi, a 'father', and a 'toymaker', Haiyū was given his current mission: an routine infiltration amongst the members of the Red Sages [color=39b54a]a double DOUBLE agent?! WHAT A TWIST FUCKING CALL SHYAMALAN[/color]. Unlike many of his predecessors, the puppet user suceeded in gaining the trust of the terrorist group, and partook in many of their missions, serving as an assassin and infiltrator, paying him well. But the skills of a Chunin would only protect him for so long, and eventually his cover was blown. But the Red Sages would continue to have use for the head of the Chikamatsu, with but a single ultimatum: Spy on the Hamajō Confederation from the inside. [/i][color=39b54a]I can confirm Yakoul will not be as merciful. lel. I'll let Partisan judge this.[/color] 【[U]Family ties[/U]】[color=39b54a]you are the only person who has managed to tl;dr this part. Holy shit[/color] [i]The life of a shinobi is a short one, fraught with peril and danger. Many shinobi who survive their missions to their mid-twenties are already considered middle-aged, and those who make it to their thirties might as well be octogenarians. Those who are smart enough to realize they are no longer as fast or skilled retire and take to the civillian life, removing themselves from danger. Those who do not, are unable to, leave behind orphans. This has become the norm for the once great Chikamatsu Clan. Once founders of puppetry, the last several shinobi wars have brought only harsh times to its members. Many of its members killed, it took upon the duty to raise those left behind. With the life of the shinobi the highest paying, and only viable, path for feeding so many mouths, the Chikamatsu began taking any and all sorts of work to keep their clan afloat. This did not prevent them from living. Soon they began having families younger as well, only to die in combat as they took harder missions for more income. Their children would be raised by siblings, older cousins or surviving aunts or uncles, until they too were killed and the burden placed on their descendants.. . While some members can break the cycle and escape, most are not so willing to leave behind the family they grew up around. The life of the Chikamatsu is one of Youth: they live young, they love young, and they die young. Haiyū is simply the newest head of the 'clan', if a gaggle of children and teenagers can even be considered as such. With the deaths of his older cousins who helped support the Clan, it finally seems the puppeteer has bitten off more than he can chew.[/i] [b]Higeki Chikamatsu| Brother | 12, Sunakagure, Academy Student and uses his own, much more tame toy puppet, Suzume. Orphaned at the age of six.[/b] [color=39b54a]baawwww[/color] [b]Komedi Chikamatsu| Sister | 8, Sunakagure, Academy Student. Youngest of Haiyū's siblings, and orphaned when she was two, being nearly raised by Haiyū. Has yet to build her puppet, but is being taught by Haiyū when he can.[/b] [color=39b54a]baaaaaawwwwwwww[/color] [b]Gekiteki Chikamatsu| Cousin| 14, Sunakagure, Genin. Parents killed on mission when younger, helped raised by the Main Branch. Brother to Sasupensu. Puppet user. He and his brother take low ranking missions and are considered to be [/b] [color=39b54a]BAAAAWWWWW[/color] [b]Sasupensu Chikamatsu| Cousin | 14, Sunakagure, Genin. Parents killed on mission when younger, helped raised by the Main Branch. Brother to Gekiteki. Puppet user.[/b] [color=39b54a]you get it[/color] [b]Hito Chikamatsu| Cousin Once Removed | 3, Sunakagure, Child. Parents killed while on mission for the Hamajō Confederation, youngest of the Main Branch's charges. As the baby of the family, Haiyū dotes upon her the most.[/b] [b]Hakurankai Chikamatsu| Cousin |DECEASED at 27, Sunakagure, Chunin killed in action during a mission for the Hamajō Confederation. Father to Hito. [/b] [b]Myūjikaru Chikamatsu| Cousin |DECEASED at 25 DECEASED, Sunakagure, Chunin killed in action during a mission for the Hamajō Confederation. Mother to Hito. [/b] [b]Gyaku Chikamatsu| Cousin | 9, Sunakagure, Academy Student[/b] [b]Kurikaesu Chikamatsu| Cousin| 5, Sunakagure, Child[/b] [b]Maebure Chikamatsu| Father| DECEASED at 34, Sunakagure, Jonin. KIA during mission.[/b] [b]Mada Chikamatsu| Mother| DECEASED at 31, Sunakagure, Jonin. KIA during mission.[/b] [b]Taishō Dokusha| Fiance | 20, Sunakagure, Waitress, currently engaged and pregnant with Haiyū's child. The two were childhood friends that blossomed into something more as he progressed through his shinobi career. Though the wedding might be a shotgun, Haiyū meant every word when he asked for her hand.[/b][color=39b54a]the insane amount of leverage the confeds can have on him. it's almost sad, except I'm a sadistic dipshit taco[/color] 【[U]Dreams and fears[/U]】 [i]Haiyū wishes more than anything to retire peacefully from shinobi life to that of a civilian [color=39b54a]so far so good, right?![/color], to raise his child when Joyū [color=39b54a]who?[/color] gives birth, and to simply continue to make his toys. He is not a fool, however, and knows full well what his endfate will be: on the wrong end of a shinobi's kunai [color=39b54a]except now treason and politics are heavily involved. returd[/color]. As much as he tries to keep his shinobi life and the life of a Red Sage seperate, he knows full well the time is coming where he will be found out. He can walk away at any time, and everyone of the mouths who relied on him to feed would starve. [/i][/indent] [hr] [u][b]Combat reports.[/b][/u] [i]Gathered from evaluation reports after missions.[/i] [indent]【[U]Fighting style[/U]】 [i]Haiyū tends to use subterfuge, misdirection, and stealth to take down his opponents, specializing in the traditional shinobi practice of "silent but deadly". Using his puppet Mamushi to augment his own taijutsu, to silently deliver a fatal bite of poison [color=39b54a]we're going to talk about that soon[/color], or to act in the background as Haundo takes the offense, Haiyū is often found at the back of combat, pulling the strings to control the story. [color=39b54a]so deep[/color][/i] 【[U]Ninja techniques[/U]】 [u]A rank techniques:[/u] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Hiding_with_Camouflage_Technique]Hiding_with_Camouflage_Technique[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]interesting[/color] [u]B rank techniques:[/u] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Mind_Body_Disturbance_Technique]Mind Body Disturbance Technique[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]Okay, there are two reasons why this technique won't even be compromised. 1) It's a Hiden, and you're not Yamanaka. 2) Even if you were, this type of jutsu is a massive issue in RP'ing, often needing nerfs and changes that eventually make it hectic. So no, denied.[/color] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Dustless_Bewildering_Cover]Dustless Bewildering Cover[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]I agree with your A rank, but bear in mind this is Kage level stuff. Completely undetectable apart from super magic sand stuff? No. Your chuunin is not as efficient as Mu. And all this would be good for is easy kills and destroys the purpose of having some PVP. I would let this pass on a high jonin or Kage, but this just breaks the game tbh. However, I could compromise. One could say it simply conceals him from dojutsu sight, because I hate these fuckers but doesn't escape detection when simply nearby nor by efficient sensors that don't have magic eyes. [/color] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Mechanical_Light_Shield_Block]Mechanical Light Shield Block[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]on his puppets or does he have a personal one?[/color] [u]C rank techniques:[/u] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Puppet_Technique]Puppet Technique[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]k[/color] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Manipulating_Attack_Blades]Manipulating Attack Blades[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]k and I like this jutsu[/color] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Prepared_Needle_Shot]Prepared Needle Shot[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]no deadly poison. Nuh-huh. If you want poison, make it custom.[/color] [i][url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Demonic_Illusion:_False_Surroundings_Technique]Demonic Illusion: False Surroundings Technique[/url][/i] [color=39b54a]k[/color] [color=39b54a]Okay so the problem I'm going to have is that while sure, he followed the guidelines of the amount of jutsu, but his puppets contain a bunch of functions, they should very well be considered a jutsu in themselves. The Dog is probably C rank, I'd even say D because I'm a nice guy. But the Cobra can easily tread in B rank due to its bizarre usage. so yeah, adapt to that.[/color] 【[U]Weaponry, tools and objects.[/U]】 [b][u]Weapon, tool or object name:[/u][/b] [i]Hebi - Mamushi.[/i] [b][u]Weapon, tool or object type:[/u][/b] [i]Ninja Puppet.[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i]Haiyū's primary puppet, Hebi resembles a small wooden snake of interlocking wooden pieces, and is controlled by Haiyū's. Initially unassuming, it resembles more of a toy than an actual ninja weapon, though it is outfitted with a few basic senbon functions. The Chikamatsu seal engraved on it's head tells a different story: the Hebi puppet is merely a container for Haiyū's true weapon, Mamushi. Resembling a metallic cobra, its body is made of overlapping iron plates, and its eyes are pinpoints of red light. Like all puppets it can be independently controlled, but it is normally found wrapped around Haiyū's arm during combat, as an elbow-length scaled metal construct whose cobra hood flares at the wrist. [color=39b54a]feels more like a nifty weapon than a puppet but sure[/color] Within the puppet are numerous tools such as retractable grapple lines, wires, senbon, a wrist blade, and seals for a fire release jutsu [color=39b54a]Too vague, if you're using fire jutsu you should 1) Detail it in the jutsu section and 2) detail how it works, does it use your chakra? Or is it like Sasori with magic storage stuff?[/color]. Within the fangs of the puppet is a single dose of fatal poison that can be injected into the target's bloodstream if it is close enough to bite [color=39b54a]No. Mirai has a deadly poison but requires multiple strikes. This is just Sasori's poison which is insanely OP in itself.[/color], though must be manually reloaded each time by Haiyū. The hood can function similarly to brass knuckles, giving Haiyū's taijutsu an extra 'oomf', and though its restricted to only part of his arm, it's iron body does wonders for shielding any damage that Haiyū can catch with it. All of this makes the Mamushi a multi-purpose utility puppet, and Haiyū's tool of choice for stealth and assasination missions for the Red Sages. Due to its unique nature, Haiyū's Mamushi puppet is somewhat mediocre at the traditional roles of puppetry, often requiring its user to get close and personal with his intended combatant. While it can be controlled as a seperate entity, on its own the puppet is neither impressive nor powerful. [color=39b54a]Does he need to dedicate chakra threads to it? The way it is used makes me guess there could be a catch.[/color][/i] [b][u]Weapon, tool or object name:[/u][/b] [i]Koinu - Inu.[/i] [b][u]Weapon, tool or object type:[/u][/b] [i]Ninja Puppet.[/i] [b][u]Description:[/u][/b] [i]Haiyū's secondary puppet, Koinu resembles a small wooden dog that barely comes up to the shinobi's shin. This is the puppet that Haiyū uses during his more 'civillian' cover during his day to day operations for the Hamajō Confederation. Initially unassuming, it resembles more of a toy than an actual ninja weapon, though it is outfitted with a few basic senbon functions. The Chikamatsu seal engraved on it's head tells a different story: the Koinu puppet is merely a container for Haiyū's true weapon, Inu. Resembling a black mechanical hunting dog that reaches up to its masters chest, gleaming teeth fill its metal mouth. Within the puppet are many of the numerous weapons, traps, and extraneous objects: Smoke bombs launchers in the shoulders in order to blind its opponents, hidden kunai launchers, hidden long blade in its mouth, large blades on the joints of his arms, legs and head, a maw filled with razor sharp steel fangs, and any of its body parts are detachable for separate attacks. Acting as a traditional puppet, all of the regular benefits and drawback of ninja-puppetry apply. [color=39b54a]This one is fine unless I missed a deadly poison here too. You know what to do then.[/color] [/i] [color=39b54a]Yeah, you need to rework some points. Pardon the silly and snarky comments, we do this to everyone. Also, you took a long time to make this. May I ask why? Also, will you be as fast to post? Because if that's the case, I'll be honest, you'll be swamped and I'll lose patience. If you promise you can keep up, then I'd be more than happy you get you in. [/color][/indent][/hider]