[@Nightknight]

The issue I'm seeing (other than the fact that she needs to be stronger for this RP) is the fact that you only seem to be active for short periods of time. This is a fast-paced RP, and it's extremely important to be able to respond to each post within about five minutes of it being posted. We also don't write long an extended descriptions--everything is written as if were taken from the point of view of a camera and microphone.