[@Hank] Ok, much more workable this time around. With that said, you still have adjustments on your plate.

Hyperdrive is also building a Redoran character, and I'm gonna say the same thing I said to him. Your character cannot be affiliated with both Redoran and Telvanni, much less under the tutelage of Neloth. An alternative would be studying war magic in-house, with the rare, but present Redoran war-wizards. Being acquainted with two great houses is one too many connections for an average Jane.

There wasn't any mention on Dwarven studies, which doesn't make sense for her to read their script. Plus, it is highly archaic and useless to learn, the equivalent of mastering Cuneiforms or Oracles Bones. Daedric is fine, on the other hand, though reading it probably means she's proficient in the Dunmeri language as well.

Lack of pet treats in inventory; how is Niernen feeding Garm?