[quote=@Mortarion]
Alright,our collab is up and posted people! I kept the line dividers, I hope that isn't a problem and if it is I'll erase them. 
[/quote]

Nice, but the divider still is incomplete in two parts. 

-After paragraph 47, right below "Shall we go in?"
-After paragraph 50, below "signs of the damage remained."

Good collabs people, I'll have the GM update tomorrow.