[@Errant Son] Your writing is fine! Don't write to impress anyone, write to satisfy yourself. "Advanced" RP is just a hollow label that indicates you take RP seriously and know how to employ punctuation, in my opinion.

However the problem is that I placed Lothren inside the building that Gawain was imprisoned in. He had asked the others to meet him downstairs (where he was returning to) so I'm concerned that you may have taken events a little far, unless Lothren is just walking back in slow motion and watching Gawain walk around.

Is it possible to cut it short after he kicks the hell out of that mage? When the others arrive, they're sure to find an interesting scene there.

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Definitely.
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Excellent.