[quote=@Crimson Raven]
As a side note, what do you guys think of the first-person perspective? Does it make the character seem more alive, or does it make the events hard to follow? Neither? Both? Other?

I'm trying to vary my writing style a little, and I have found that the first person is the easiest and most fun to write.
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I would also agree with Silver Fox as well. 

Your first-person perspective wasn't bad. But usually read everyone's post as if I'm reading a book and a majority of time people post with third-person which makes it sound better. Just like Silver Fox mentioned, it can be a bit disorienting for me with the constant. But I'm okay if you switch back and forth with it, especially of you're comfortable with it. My preference is just third-person since it would be easier to read everyone post like that, but it doesn't take too long for me to adjust to a to first-person.