Just a note - I am being exceptionally harsh in some cases due to posts being extraordinarily good.

[@Lugubrious] Who is this proud soul?
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 7/10.
Story Line Advancement: 5/10 [the coming of this proud soul alone is story line advancement, I think we're going to see some very interesting things from him...]
Character Development: 6/10 [his worldview is fascinating - beauty and eternity are meant to be mutually exclusive, but he seems to think otherwise...he also messed up the beautiful aphids and caterpillars T-T]
Independence: 3/10 [so far so good, you haven't had much opportunity to interact with other characters but all is good]
Total: 32/50; 64%; 6 Khookies to Allure (I believe that your hero's name?)

[@Dawnscroll]
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 8/10 [what can I say, that was a massive post and your writing quality was consistent throughout]
Story Line Advancement: 5/10 [creating things, humans advancing, much philosophy]
Character Development: 7/10 [900 years of growth right there]
Independence: 4/10 [you're doing a great deal on your own, and that is brilliant, but you will be limited so long as you don't interact with other characters] 
Total: 34/50; 68%; 7 Khookies - 900 years passed, Time passage bonus activated, 6 extra Khookies - total of 13 Khookies to Elysium

[@Kho]
For the small mention of what The One By Immortals Altered has been doing in the past two posts, as well as Time passage bonus, 3 Khookies to The One By Immortals Altered

[@Cyclone]
Creation post
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 7/10
Story Line Advancement: 2/10
Character Development: 3/10
Independence: 3/10 
Total: 25/50; 50%; 5 Khookies to Ventus

Second post
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 8/10
Story Line Advancement: 5/10
Character Development: 5/10
Independence: 7/10 
Total: 36/50; 72%; 7 Khookies to Ventus
I'm not sure how old Ventus is, so will withhold giving a Time passage bonus until I am told

[@Nevix] If you don't confirm whether you're in or out in the next 12 hours, you're out.