[@Lugubrious] Why you no say who proud soul is?
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Writing Quality: 9/10.
Story Line Advancement: 7/10 [poor Navy - will its destruction bring about Jvanic Wrath? Will The One By Immortals Altered forgive the one who wounded her so?]
Character Development: 6/10 [his interaction with the natural cat and the unnatural one is fascinating - does it mean that his perception of beauty is physical alone?]
Independence: 6/10 
Total: 38/50; 76%; 8 Khookies to Allure

[@Inuyasha] Don't think I ever told you that we've rebooted this...if you want to join, feel free to say so :)