All of which is contained below are my own opinions and that's about it. Just thought some people would want to have some reviews. If not, oh well, here they are. [hider=The Napoleonic Wars]Yepp. That's a thing. It's rather nice of you to take a time and place in history and then change that in some way to make it an entry. It's also one way to make an offer for their families. All of their families that has EVER LIVED were at stake, eh. Interesting! XD … Still, the absolute lack of any characters at all throughout the entry made it kind of boring to read, I'm afraid. Since half-way through, we already pretty much knew what was going to happen. There wasn't much excitement, just brutal slaughter. Felt like that dragged on a bit. But still, your writing is quite nice. So that's about that. Still. That makes me wonder how this labour will work when you make the main character “All Humanities' Armies”. Would it then technically be alright to leave all these armies alive even if the entry kills their families, would it be alright to leave whole armies alive? … No point in asking, nobody survived. XD[/hider] [hider=Abyss]... Yeah, you're right, it is confusing. I had no idea what was going on at all during the first part, and while the second part explained most of it to the degree that I actually didn't need the explaining notes, you're right, I can't really say that it forgives the entry. I've never been a fan of either confusing nor negative entries. This is both. Though, the story did make me interested in what's going to happen to Taina from now on. But, suppose, that her life kinda still exists. … I do worry a little about “Both the old and young need to be amongst their number”, but eh. Otherwise, it follows the labour rather well, and it does tell a story that I understood by the end of it, which is alright.. Yeah, that's about it. I'll leave the rest to Terminal.[/hider] [hider=Plutonian (mostly just me talking about my own entry)]A problem I had with this labour was that, the things that this labour demands to happen, they're not things that should be completed in a short span of time. Sure, one COULD just have had the character in question say “NO WAY!” instantly and then see everyone they love die, but to me it feels like that would have made the story very hurried! And then, when I had decided on a character and a turn of events to happen, I couldn't just have her change her mind too quickly either, that'd feel too abrupt! She had to have gone through a few battles first! … So, in the quest of somehow completing this labour and simultaneously make a good story with reasonable pacing, my entry became a little lengthy. A little. … And then I was randomly inspired to throw in more things to more properly give each character a reason to be there, so my mind wouldn't feel they were fillings that didn't have a reason to be there other than souls to talk to. And this was the result. I didn't actually start dividing the story into chapters until I realized that my story was becoming too long not to have them. So, yeah. I apologize to those who had to read my very long entry. Still, I hope it was at least reasonably enjoyable. Haha. I rewrote the entity of the last battle the last day because I felt it wasn't personal enough the first way I wrote it. It became a lot longer. I hope it became better. Haha.[/hider] [hider=Lumina's Loss]I will have to say... GIVE ME A CLEAR DESCRIPTION ON IF THE MAIN CHARACTER IS A MERMAID OR NOT TO BEGIN WITH. XD … Alright, there it was, in the fourth paragraph. I was straining myself up until that moment. Haha. … Alright. It kind of feels like that ended way too quickly. You spent such a beautiful amount of time setting things up and developing things, that when suddenly this magic, that demand, that stab and those consequences happened a little too quickly. That's actually kind of something I was afraid would happen with my own entry when this labour was presented, hence partly why my entry is so long, I didn't see a way to make this labour justice without stretching things our a bit. But, still, that was a rather interesting world you set up (obviously reminding me of the Little Mermaid) which I would have been interested to read more about. Yet, now it ended so abruptly. Oh, well. … Oh, yeah. It was you who said you had to end it quickly because you had no time. Yeeeaaah... I can see that. Too bad. Oh, well![/hider] [hider=Generation Lost]Oh, THAT'S a solution to avoiding a longer entry. … Yeah, this is a good entry. There's sadness, but the main character took the “follow their demands” route, so it spared his family with reasonable degrees of hope by the end of it. It isn't clear if we should be happy or sad, something's definitely wrong here, but all things considered, it was very realistic and life-like. It feels like this is how some such encounter really would happen, and the solution was pretty reasonably good for the main character, as far as outcomes that completes the labour goes. Still, the request of the enemy wasn't particularly hard to accept. In any case. As far as I can tell, you've done it again. Haha.[/hider] [hider=The Contract]... So, you've been dragged through the hole to hell, and there's still this much left of the entry. So, aaaaaare you going to have a positive or a negative ending? Wheeeeeere are you going with this? Oh, alright, to a “to be continued”. Indeed, this rather simply completes the labour that is around this time around. I will, however, rather easily admit to not having been particularly interested in the descriptions of the depths of hell which you have provided here. I'm unsure where you're leading this tale, but, um. If you make Michael act against Xantier at any time later in this, and that then does NOT result in the deaths of this family, won't you have failed this labour that perhaps this chapter on its own clears? … Am I thinking too deeply? Haha. Otherwise, your writing and imagination is fine enough. Yeah. Haha.[/hider]