[quote=@MMGiru]
[b]Nickname/Alias:[/b] Occasionally called ‘Masa’, primarily as a joke about how pretentious it is
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Care to explain the joke to someone who doesn't speak Japanese?

Other than that I must say that you've done a great job. I think the character as a whole fits well with the setting, the background and equipment is fine and the techniques are all well though out. 
As I stated in my earlier feedback I would rather see the ignition technique as a D-rank, but if you want to list it as C I won't argue.
As far as I'm concerned the character is approved, but the hat must have a say as well. 

[@The Mad Hatter] As you've stated yourself, your writing is horrible so there is no need for me to point out any details of this. After reading through the character there was really only one thing that stood out. It is the split within the clan. While a young/old split is easy to explain and understand I feel that this kind of split perhaps should be dealt with with a little more care. We are talking about changing the core rules of how these people live. To say that all the old guys wanted thing to stay the same and only a few youngsters wanted stuff to change… Too simple. Perhaps you could go into greater detail about what happened right before the split? Was someone in the clan caught practising chakra manipulation? Did someone suddenly say “I don't get what's so bad about it” at dinner and everyone suddenly turned silent and serious? 

Luckily we have historical events in our world where similar splits have been made, and let's just say that they didn't come from nothing, and they didn't end in nothing. As I know you are well versed in history I suggest you consider Catholicism/protestantism as well as protestantism/puritanism. Yes it's an exaggerated example, but in a way the change protestantism wanted was smaller than the one your clan/renegade faction of the clan wanted.

[@Bishop] I can't see any big changes done to your character sheet so I guess the earlier feedback still stands.