[@KabenSaal]
As well as what i said in my last post, I'm just going to point out some details that may need to be looked into as some things, in my opinion, don't mesh up correctly with the overall theme of the rp.

[quote]But, as soon as she was able to do all of them, she was trained in her father's trade of gun and knife, or occasionally sword.[/quote]
Its a futuristic RP that involves mechs. While guns are believable, us as humans in today's age stopped using swords before ww1 which was also the introduction of firearms. Taking that into consideration, I don't think anyone would really be trained in sword use for war purposes when we have giant NC Mechs.

[quote]There were strange feelings about when she was inside, and any sort of mistep caused her to feel it, and it hurt.[/quote]
The ability to feel in an NC may not be that high. Remember they probably don't have pain sensors so stubbing your toe shouldn't hurt. The pain a pilot would feel would come from your mind loosing it's connection with the limb or such. May need clarification from LHG or Gowi, but it seems the way you described it is a little too sensitive when you're going to be shot at by missiles.

[quote]Upon landing the near-thirty foot drop, it felt like her legs were going to break, and that sudden shock dazed her for quite a while. [/quote]
NCS can drop out of flight from several hundred feet in the sky. They are also taller than 30 feet in some cases. Again, the sensitivity is a little too high.

Overall, I also think your NC would be lacking a bit in armaments when compared to some others. You have said she won't have much weaponary or guns and instead will charge into battle. An NC can move at about the same speed as mech warrior online, so that's about 50km/h. Without any weapons or armaments, she'd be pretty easy pickings for someone like my Tahlia and her Spyder.