[@Kassarock]: Looking good at a glance. I don't have time to drill down into it in minute detail (and I will :P) right now, so I'll have a proper look when I can.

[@Dead Cruiser]: Gotcha. The general rule is that Presences can't perceive Essence occurring at a higher level than themselves. To all intents and purposes, this basically means they can look at the raddest, coolest magical shit you're doing, and straight-up not notice that anything has happened. While they, like everything else, 'have' and emit essence (and you will be able to detect and perceive this: think 'auras'), this is completely a byproduct of their existence and never an intended action. This means that, from a Host's perspective, mortals are stupidly easy to manipulate, and that they can assume whatever role they choose in mortal society, if any, just by kinda 'making it so'.

I've been pretty slow on writing my own character, partly because I'll also have to write up God and Trouble as well, and I know that my sheet will, as you say, kinda be judged as a benchmark for what I'm looking to see. Plus I've got a game in the NRP section that I'm making sure I don't neglect. Expect my sheet today or tomorrow. If you want to risk it, shoot me what you have and I can give you some idea of how close you are to what I'm looking for.