[@Dead Cruiser] [@Kassarock]

Yo, so, it's true that Cruiser's character is pretty similar to Kassarock's. If we get enough sheets in, I actually wouldn't mind having two chaotic forces, but since that's all we have for now, I'm gonna suggest that Kassarock gets dibs on the 'chaotic' character, simply by being first. One possible fix is talking to each other and finding/engineering key contrasts that set the two apart and emphasising them - if you can't, then we can wait and see what and who else we get to see if this town is big enough for the two of you. There's definitely room for Destruction!Chaos and Corruption!Chaos, though, if you can refine the concepts between you.

Either way, here are some notes on your sheets on things I've picked up on that could maybe be tweaked or nuanced somehow. Apologies if I'm being picky, but... heh, I'm picky.

[quote=@Kassarock][b]Flaws:[/b]
[list][*] Everyone hates them/is sacred of them[/list][/quote]

I get where you're going with it, but you don't know who 'everybody' is, yet, so you might be jumping the gun here. Simply saying you have a really poor reputation might give people more to work with - also, I wouldn't be keen to see you eschew contact with other players by creating a character that simply [i]can't[/i] be cooperated with. Maybe there's a way to relax this somewhat?

[quote]normally these are hidden by a set of ever present black sunglasses
 ...
were he to take off the jacket you’d be able to see the art work that adorns his body[/quote]

Note that your character's clothes are literally a part of their physical presence. I can imagine sunglasses being pushed onto the top of the head, but 'taking off' a jacket wouldn't really be a thing.

[quote=@Dead Cruiser][list][*]Takyon is an unpredictable, despicable creature. Reviled by all, save for his utterly deranged followers.[/list][/quote]

As I build more of the city, there will be more scope for you to nuance this, and the notion of 'followers' would not be impossible, but the idea of 'worship' might not manifest quite as you imagine it: it'll be more like, you've weaselled your way into a position within the mortal life such that you have 'friends' who may or may not worship the ground you walk on, but it wouldn't be in any way a religious or spiritual worship. Also, I said to Kassarock, he might not be reviled by [i]all[/i], so you should consider giving other players the chance to cooperate with him.

[quote=@Dead Cruiser]with the occasional presence of a dark, hooded jacket.[/quote]

As mentioned to Kassarock, appearances in this only fluctuate subtly. 

[quote]dark forces[/quote]

I'm not sure 'dark' is really a feature of this game, in the sense of 'holiness': with a bit of tweakery or clarification, this could very easily involve the negative, decadent emotions of the city at large, like greed and hatred? Which I'd ****in' love, personally.