[quote=@Spoopy Scary]
[@Nosuchthing]I'm reading "genuinely a good man" and "enjoys killing and torturing certain kinds of people" over and over again in your sheet. The repetitiveness sounds like someone talking to themselves and trying to rationalize murder. I don't think that's how you're gonna convince the reader that Matthew means well.

I'm also expecting him to commit suicide since he has a power too.
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He is trying to rationalise murder...

I know someone who is actually quite a nice bloke, very polite, very intelligent, kind of guy that you wouldn't mind having a few drinks with or having around for dinner. He just happens to think that all non-white British are scum and should be deported.

Matthew is simply the same thing but with delusions.

And as to him having a power, he's obsessed, stands to reason that someone whose purpose it is to punish metahumans would be immune to metahumans. At least in his mind.

[quote=@Mr Allen J]
[@Nosuchthing] Matthew's sheet is... weird, to say the least. I can't get a good grasp on his character because it feels like the serial killer aspects are tacked on tbh. You keep mentioning how he's such a great person - that just so happens to kill people. I know what you're going for, but it could be phrased much better.
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I'll see what I can do :)

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[hider=Matthew Drake]
[h3][u][b]Basic Information[/b][/u][/h3]

[b]Name:[/b] 
[INDENT]Matthew Drake[/INDENT]
[b]Nickname/Alias/Etc:[/b] 
[INDENT][/INDENT]
[b]Gender:[/b] 
[INDENT]Male[/INDENT]
[b]Age:[/b] 
[INDENT]38[/INDENT]
[b]Height:[/b] 
[INDENT]6 ft[/INDENT]
[b]Weight:[/b] 
[INDENT]200lbs[/INDENT]
[b]Home District:[/b] 
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[h3][b][u]Appearance[/u][/b][/h3]

[b]Hair Color:[/b]
[INDENT]Brown[/INDENT] 
[b]Eye Color:[/b]
[INDENT]Brown[/INDENT] 
[b]Ethnicity:[/b]
[INDENT]Caucasian[/INDENT] 
[b]Physical Appearance:[/b]
[INDENT] Casually, almost disarmingly good looking, Matthew has aged well, he is in his late thirties, but could be mistaken for a man in his late twenties, with natural, thick hair, and a relatively unlined face. He is clearly trim and in shape, and his taste in clothes demonstrate a man who has experienced a great deal of success in his life, and the money that comes with it, though he could hardly be called arrogant. He keeps his hair fairly short, though with enough length for it to always be just a little short of falling into his eyes. He favours a clean shaven look, and prefers the attentions of a Turkish barber though he will perform it himself if necessary, he has an appearance to maintain after all.

Whatever he does clearly allows him time for exercise, and his expensive, well cut clothes make it clear that he is trim and in shape, with solid layers of muscle concealed beneath his shirt. He has a faint tan, not from the sunbeds, but from time spent in warmer climes, though it is faint enough to make it clear that he is no sun worshipper. [/INDENT] 
[b]Attire:[/b] 
[INDENT]Optional[/INDENT]

[h3][b][u]Personality[/u][/b][/h3]

[b]Innate & Outward Personality:[/b]
[INDENT]Matthew is a charming man, he’s a gentleman, with impeccable manners, a truly chivalrous nature, and a proclivity for brutally murdering metahumans. A humanitarian, he will never put himself before others, and is, above all, willing to sacrifice himself for the betterment of humanity. In particular the part of humanity that doesn’t wield terrifying, reality defying powers.

Thanks perhaps to his experience as a lawyer he has the knack for earning people’s trust, for speaking to someone for but a few moments and behaving easily and comfortably in their presence, like old friends reunited after years. He can be kind, and fiercely loyal to those he calls a friend. He doesn’t particularly enjoy violence, but is a man who is willing to do what must be done, or at least what he feels must be done.

Truthfully, he struggles with what he does, but knows that someone has to return balance to the world. He tries to give them a chance, but after enough time they all trip up, they all demonstrate that they believe themselves to be better than normal humans, and then the terrible, cold rage comes over. [/INDENT] 
[b]Hobbies/Interests:[/b]
[INDENT]Optional[/INDENT]
[b]Skills/Talents:[/b] 
[INDENT] Street fighting – There is no true art of fighting that Matthew is familiar with, but he has spent the last five years killing people, he can fight well, and he fights dirty, with no rules, no honour. It is just brutal, vicious efficiency intended to put down an opponent as quickly as possible, without concern for their health.
Lawyer – For years Matthew was one of the most successful lawyers in America, he may have left the profession behind, but he still knows his way around the law. It also means he is good at making people believe what he says, at trusting his interpretation of things. [/INDENT]
[b]Goals/Motivation[/b]
[INDENT]Matthew seeks closure, to feel like whatever mission he has is done. He is almost like a ghost, seeking to finalise its unfinished business, but his obsession will not allow closure, it will not allow relief, and he will spiral further into a dark and murderous state of mind from which he may never emerge.[/INDENT]
[b]History/Bio:[/b]
[INDENT] Matthew Drake was the last person you would expect to be a killer, a successful lawyer, he began a career as a defence lawyer. It paid well, and he was good at it, so it paid even better, but he was never truly comfortable in his job. He was an intelligent man with a passion for the law, and working as a defence attorney merely showed him how easily it could be twisted and manipulated to say whatever you want. Still he was very good at it, and he enjoyed doing what he was good at, as many do, and pushed his protesting conscience to the side in favour of profit and success.

He met a young lawyer there, a woman with an equal passion for her job, albeit with rather less flair than he himself possessed. She was young, attractive, and intelligent, and he fell in love with her, even beyond. Those who knew him agreed that it was a little too fast to really be healthy, but Matthew was infatuated, he didn’t listen to the warnings of his close friends. Of course it was excessively unprofessional for co-workers to sleep together, even more so considering that he was her superior, but they kept the affair a secret until it ended, suddenly. He’d assigned her to a case defending a young metahuman, one who had been accused of abusing his abilities to commit crimes. 

He had sworn his innocence, and whether he was or not later became a moot point. He snapped under the pressure, and murdered eight people in the court room before being disabled and detained by NEST. Elizabeth Shriver was one of the eight, he’d snapped her neck with a single careless blow. The worst part of it all is that he should have been in the room, he was the lead chair in the case, but he’d been running late. Matthew knew only too well that he could have stopped the deaths of everyone in that room, but most of all Elizabeth. He left his job, disappeared for three weeks, and when he returned he had no interest in acting as a defence attorney, joining the DA’s office to become a prosecutor.

He worked tirelessly for four years, worked himself into the ground, and though he frequently got his man, too often did he see criminal metahumans, benefitted by a system that had never been equipped to deal with them. Every victory he achieved was made all the more hollow by those battles he lost, and he grew into a deeper depression, until finally taking the advice of his friends and family and quit. He was a wealthy man, without enough to retire in luxury, but at least enough to live comfortably for some time.

Unfortunately, without his work he grew deeper into depression, and even further into obsession, he would never be able to truly gain closure, the man who killed his love was imprisoned in one of the highest security prisons in America, and would remain so until he died of old age. So Matthew sought closure elsewhere. A gangbanger with the ability to slice flesh with his fingers, released thanks to a broken chain of custody in evidence, was sliced apart in an alley. A woman who had slaughtered two of her co-workers in a moment of rage. She had been released when the arresting officer was found to have searched her apartment without a warrant. She was never found.

Matthew knew enough about the system not to get caught, and he grew gradually more convinced that the law couldn’t deal with them, it didn’t know how to deal with people who thought themselves gods. He’d had to take the law into his own hands. He kills those who have escaped justice, those who, in his mind, believe themselves superior. The arrogance, the superiority of metahumans had to be dealt with, and DOVE and RAVEN were more concerned with looking after their wellbeing than teaching them how to operate in a human society. So Matthew would have to be societies dark knight, judge, jury and executioner. [/INDENT] 

[h3][u][b]Relationships[/b][/u][/h3]

[b]Family:[/b] 
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[b]Dynamics:[/b] (Relations with other characters - You don't have to put relation with family here.)
[indent][h3]| [b]Name Here[/b] |[/h3] | [b]{Impression (Good/Bad/Neutral}[/b] | [b]{Relationship (Friend, Rival, Crush, etc)}[/b] | [i]"Quote Here."[/i] |
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[h3][b][u]Abilities[/u][/b][/h3]

[b]Power Class:[/b]
[INDENT]Power[/INDENT] 
[b]Power:[/b] 
[INDENT]Simply put, Matthew passively saps the metahuman energy of anyone within thirty feet of him. This ability acts instantly on metahumans, and only functions when they attempt to utilise their ability, that is to say, that should they attempt to use their ability, Matthew’s ability will instantly absorb the energy that would have been expended in the use of the power, effectively rendering the metahuman powerless while they are within the radius of his power.

This means that metahuman’s will feel just as drained as they would do after any use of their ability, while receiving none of the benefits. It can even have a limited effect on abilities that have effected physical changes upon the metahuman in question. Though they will still be able to utilise whatever benefits the physical changes bestow upon them, they will tire out significantly more rapidly than they would in any other situation.

He can manipulate this aura, that is to say, the radius, expanding it from the surface of his skin, up to thirty feet about himself, and anything in between, at will. It will always make him immune to abilities that affect him directly, such as healing or telepathy, that is unconditional.
[/INDENT]
[b]Limits:[/b]
[INDENT]Metahumans that are outside of his radius can still affect him, so, for example, a metahuman who can throw fire can still engulf him in flames, or a metahuman that wields powerful, matter destroying lasers can still cut him in half. As long as it does not rely upon manipulating his body or mind to have an effect. Metahumans who possess enhanced strength that has gifted them with far denser musculature can still use their strength, though they will tire more easily, as he cannot rob them of the physical changes their abilities have gifted them. This ‘theft’ of metahuman energy can also not induce ashing, no matter how far he pushes the metahuman in question, and he has tried, the most he can push them to is unconsciousness. [/INDENT]
[b]Weaknesses/Drawbacks:[/b] 
[INDENT]Though he has not yet discovered his limit, it is likely that attempting to suppress any more than six or seven metahumans at a time will tax his abilities sorely, and should they persist in trying to break the effect they may even induce ashing in him as he absorbs more power than his system can deal with.[/INDENT]

[b][u]Other:[/u][/b] 
[INDENT][list][*] Matthew is spiralling into an obsession that can only see his own destruction, he only targets metahumans who he believes have escaped justice for their crimes, or who may never be brought to court. His hold on the true meaning of justice and crime may be slipping however…[/list][/INDENT]

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OK, I've tweaked him a little, trying to make him sound less like a serial killer and more like a vigilante who exclusively targets criminal metahumans, albeit with far more lethal force than is perhaps necessary. Let me know what you think [@Mr Allen J]