[quote=@WiseDragonGirl]@TerminalI went back to the entry and read it again. I still don't see the mistakes you found. I'm sorry. If I repeated the same mistakes, I probably think they are correctly used. Just like I can't find the words I spelled properly but used incorrectly. I know that in the past you let an entry of mine pass because it met your standards, but just barely and the seventh labour was also grudgingly passed by RomanAria because of the grammar. Do you think I have what it takes to compete in the next labours? Because I feel after all the RPGC's and Labours, I didn't improve much grammar-wise, seeing how often I see the same kind of feedback return.[/quote]

I said in my review that there were fewer grammar mistakes in your entry than in the previous one. You are improving.

[quote=@WiseDragonGirl]Please, everyone, if you see bad grammar, spelling mistakes, awkward sentences, typo's, I need people to go over them with me. I don't know what I do wrong and I don't feel like I'm improving at all in this aspect. [/quote]

There are two reasons why I did not and generally do not go out of my way to specifically point out these kinds of errors. Firstly, doing so takes time. If I were to include a list each time I wrote a review, easily 80% of the time spent writing the review would be dedicated to that purpose alone. Secondly and as an extension of the first point, there are a lot of errors present (even if they are sparse relative to the length of the entry itself) - it is supremely tedious to have to point them out.

That said, since you have expressed concern over the issue, here is a list of (nearly) every single grammatical error in the entry. I omitted all errors present in quotations and in repeated paragraphs, since those are implied. Errors are in bold and underlined. A few have clarifying commentary in parenthesis to explain the precise problem in instances where it is not immediately apparent.

[hider=Grammar Errors][quote=Second Paragraph]Mitch sat at his desk in his apartment, working on a case-study about a pulmonary illness. He placed the final dot [b][u]on the on the[/u][/b] piece of paper in front of him and put his pen down. As his eyes moved over the words he had written down to answer the case study [b][u]he felt pleased about himself[/u][/b], he had done a good job again. Like always.[/quote]

[quote=Third Paragraph]This isn’t the first time a [b][u]characters[/u][/b] voice comes up in my head, I’ve had some good conversations like this in the past. I’ve even asked a character to tell me about something in their life and just let them talk, it gave me a great inside in their personality. I look at the piece I wrote as I let the conversation unfold in my mind.[/quote]

[quote=Fourth Paragraph]I look it up, I know superiority complex is a thing otherwise I wouldn’t have the word in my mind. [b][u]It doesn’t take longer than open Google[/u][/b] and type in the search words for me to find a Wikipedia page on it. I can’t say I like what I read.[/quote]

[quote=Fifth Paragraph]“I really don’t see you with an inferiority complex, let’s stick with narcissism, that suits you much better.” I close the browser again, [b][u]I read what I needed to read[/u][/b].[/quote]

[quote=Below Fifth Paragraph]“Really? Look. [b][u]It’s not because[/u][/b] (this should be just because) this Adler-guy came up with the definition for superiority complex it’s the absolute truth. In modern psychology people also [b][u]belief[/u][/b] a person with the superiority complex just feels better than others, you read that!”[/quote]

[quote=Below Sixth Paragraph]“Let’s go over them. Maybe I do feel better than others, I have ‘a haughty body language’, I might ‘use other people without considering the cost of doing so’ and I have ‘problems in sustaining satisfying relationships’, at least until I finally meet Benjamin’s sister in a few years as you already wrote down, but I don’t have ‘hypersensitivity to any insults or imagined insults’, ‘detesting those who do not admire them’, ‘flattery towards people who admire and affirm them’, ‘a lack of psychological awareness’, ‘pretending to be more important than they really are’, ‘bragging (subtly but persistently) and exaggerating their achievements’ or ‘claiming to be an "expert" at many things’. I’m good at what I do, you never made me say I’m an expert on many things. Narcissism is clearly not the way to go, so go with superiority complex instead. Does it matter what Adler said? You’re the writer, even if you want to base yourself on true facts, you’re free to choose the view you prefer if there are more than one. So, rewrite that, make me bored instead of pleased and change my personality trait to superiority complex. That suits me much better.” 

(The entire first sentence runs on for quite some time. It should have been partitioned in some fashion with either a full stop at some point, or perhaps a semicolon or two).[/quote]

[quote=Below Sixth Paragraph]“Just do what I suggested. It will [b][u]proof[/u][/b] I’m right.”

“Good, now that is sorted, re-write that piece and make me bored instead of pleased. You’ll see, it will [b][u]proof[/u][/b] I’m right, it will fit me much better.”[/quote]

[quote=Seventh Paragraph]The only reply I can think of is a groan, but damn it, Mitch has a good point and I don’t know how to counter it anymore. Even if the discussion comes to an end, it continues to haunt my mind. Thinking back, it’s true [b][u]I[/u][/b] [u](even in bold and underlined this one is hard to see, so I added this as well).[/u] didn’t display many narcissistic character traits and it’s true his father always demands the best grades from Mitch. I think about all the things Mitch pointed out and I can’t disagree with him. As much as it pains me to admit, Mitch is right. I [b][u]can[/u][/b] counter his arguments.  Superiority complex might just be the way to go, it does fit his character. So, I start over.[/quote][/hider]