If there's anything either of you would like to discuss regarding your reviews, feel free to either bring it up here in the OOC, or to shoot Draco and I a PM! Make sure that if you PM us, to do so in a singular PM. That way we can both respond to and see what's going on.

[@AimeChambers]
Alright! We really like the picture you've painted of Viktor, but there are a few discrepancies that need to be cleared up. King Vincent was a very kind and just man; he wouldn't have turned his back on his own flesh and blood like that. Though it's likely that he had Lady Melody leave his court, he would have taken Viktor in as his own and tried to raise him as though he had been born from the queen. Since Melody would no longer be a lady of the court, it does stand to reason that someone would have seen her as shameful to the kingdom and killed her. But as for Viktor being isolated and locked away, I don't think King Vincent would have done that. He would have tried to socialize him with his siblings, though the age gap would have made it difficult for sure.

Also, just for reference, the nobles and servants wouldn't speak ill of Viktor around the royal family, so any word of him being a shame to the family or a black sheep would have been spoken behind the family's back. It's unlikely that anyone outside of the castle would even know he was a bastard child - which leaves room for a lot of speculation on his heritage by the people of the kingdom. The only thing I ask you change about what's been said about him is being 'the devil's spawn' - that would generally imply a problem with the father, not the mother. Alternatives could be 'the son of a witch' or something to that effect, implying bad things about his mother.

[@Tsar Gatto]
Since we're reviewing three characters in one go, I'll try to separate the reviews clearly by putting them in hiders. ovo
(Also, you've reminded me that I only have Ichabod's more humanoid form for a picture - I suppose he just doesn't leave it often? I'll have to find a more demonic form for him.)

[hider=King Asmodeus]
So, the first thing - Asomdeus is, as you've acknowledged, OP. Generally, our rule of thumb is this - a limit of two abilities, and they need to be related. For example, my necromancer, Ichabod, has longevity (his natural lifespan is longer than your average demon, due in part to his consumption of parts of souls) and necromancy (which is, of course, raising the dead, where he takes part of their soul and consumes it, while the rest of it is used to reanimate the body). I apologize that this was not made clear in the main post - we previously had this specified, and missed it when we were rewriting the roleplay for its reboot.

Ultimately, what we're suggesting for Asmodeus is this - the soul consumption is a fantastic demon ability, and it can be used in place of mana for his magic. However, his magic needs to be limited to a single type. For instance, Aislinn was a pyromancer, who when she cursed Lenore, passed on the creation of fire, but not manipulation. Another example is the demon who cursed Danielle passed on demon summoning, another type of magic. Ichabod, as well, has magic in his necromancy. There is also Hadrian, who manipulates light into solid constructs. Asomdeus needs a field to dominate, not a vast collection of sorcery. The only thing we won't accept is telepathy - it's not something we approve of being used on other players, so you'd be limited to using it on NPCs of your creation, which would severely limit your power usage. (And where's the fun in that?) Still, if you'd like to keep the telepathy, those are the limitations you'll need to keep in mind.

Something important in regards to his age is that Asmodeus is likely not the only one older than the kingdoms - we don't have the lore post up, so this wasn't made clear, and we're sorry about that. The world is stil new, so a lot of angels and demons are older than the kingdoms, and watched the humans form them. Of course, they didn't do it alone - there were both angelic and demonic messengers, who brought word of the archangels which the kingdoms were formed around. If you don't want to specify Asmodeus's "true" age - as I didn't for Ichabod or Picard, since they largely masquerade in their human forms - you can just list the age he appears. Ultimately, though, no one living on the physical plane of Eden is older than 1000. That's when their physical form dies, and they're returned to the spiritual plane.

The only other thing I'm going to mention is this. Again, without our lore post, this was unclear, and we're sorry about that. The kingdom of Lucifer has only been sealed away for nearly 300 years. The reason it's such a short period of time is that it was largely humans that sealed away the kingdom of Lucifer, so without much support from angels, they could only make the seal so strong. I trust that Asmodeus had a small, trusted court to guard his sleeping form, and that his disappearance from the throne is what gave way to the few previous rulers to his return. Otherwise, someone would have easily found his slumbering body and killed him in his sleep to assume full and unchallenged command of the throne. (Or, at least, unchallenged until someone felt powerful enough to take them on.)[/hider]

[hider=Slarthanius]
Slarthanius's ability is fantastic, but there's one issue - when a human is cursed, a portion of the ability is passed on. They would not become a servant to him, but instead most likely only be able to create infectious laughter in a single person. The idea that he can cause mass hysteria is interesting, so long as you keep the number of people he can "infect" at once reasonable. If you intend to have him use this ability on a player character, make sure to clear it with them first!

As for his blade, we're not accepting enchanted weapons. He can still possess a curved blade - perhaps one made of a metal that handles heat well, so he can stick it in a fire or something - but it cannot be enchanted to always be hot.

The edit of his ability only means this effect on his biography - he can still have gathered a small cult, but not by means of cursing them. Sure, he can have cursed several humans to encourage them (and even trick them) into following him and pledging their allegiance to him, and even recruit humans that have been cursed by other demons. Also, I wanted to make sure that Slarthanius has not mentioned the kingdom of Lucifer to anyone - there shouldn't be any word of it in the kingdoms, and anyone he may have tried to tell should/would have laughed it off. At this point, the kingdom nothing more than a bedtime story to tell children, whether it's to frighten them with demons, or to tell them a dashing story of heroes defeating demons. Since he's largely masquerading as a human, that would only increase the lack of credibility in any claims that the kingdom of Lucifer still thrives.

Last but not least, since he's masquerading as a human out and about in Eden, please include what age he appears! Also, if possible, mention in his biography what kingdom he claims to come from, since he can't claim to have come from Lucifer. I'm sure a traveling bard is bound to be asked that question at one point or another by border guards, so it would just be helpful to know in case you'd like his merry band of minstrels to have a reputation throughout the kingdoms.[/hider]

[hider=Lady Visiloth]
Unfortunately, we don't really have a place for nobles in the roleplay. You do mention her serving the monarchs, so she could perhaps be a member of the close court, though she'd be listed as a servant, like Picard is in Raphael. We'd recognize she's a lady of the court, but she'd be listed as a servant. Otherwise, if that doesn't suit you, she can be a bishop - bishops possess magic (which I would consider appearance morphing to fall under) and those in the Sheol Cathedral directly serve the reigning monarch(s). The only discrepancy I see is that as she's only 97, I doubt there would have been much changing of the monarchs in her time in Lucifer. Maybe three times at most - the third being Asmodeus re-assuming the throne. However, she most likely would have only been present to serve the previous king to Asmodeus's return.

With her ability, the curse should apply to both men and women in the same fashion. The fact that they are only gifted one appearance with the curse is not a problem, and though it may be unpleasant for men to transform into women, it shouldn't be a gender-specific curse. That's the only issue we have with that. Morphing her appearance is fascinating, and I like that it's restricted to humanoid forms.

As mentioned in Asmodeus's review, the kingdom has been sealed away for 300 years. Visiloth is only 97, so it's unlikely she knows what life outside of the underground kingdom is like. She can have her dreams and desires, but she'd be limited to knowledge from scriptures and word of mouth from older demons. Her restlessness is understandable, but I wanted to make that clear - she's most likely never seen the outside world. That's just for your reference, and not anything you need to add or change in your profile.

The last thing is that, as for Asmodeus and Slarthanius, it would be appreciated if you listed her appearing age alongside her "true" age.[/hider]