[@idlehands] First, I'm putting you on blast for re-creating Jennifer Lawrence. This is straight up [url=http://cdn1.ouchpress.com/media/celebrities/175/jennifer-lawrence-15322.jpg]Jennifer Lawrence[/url] and you seriously could've used the picture in that link. I mean, it's uncanny, right?

Anyway, the Elder Scrolls Jennifer Lawrence is actually pretty cool. I appreciate the simplicity of her character in that you focus on very few, yet key points to her life as they relate to what we will see. Many of us tend to slip into the habit of describing [i]everything[/i], forgetting that it's okay to have some off-camera moments open to mystery or basic life. I feel like this occurs with Gaela. Sort of like my critique with [@Hank], I felt like you dropped an interesting seed then left it untended, though. I am speaking about the death of Gaela's father and her subsequent desire to [i]burn baby burn[/i]. I get that this was a sign that trauma occurred, but once you had Gaela dive into magic proper I was surprised that her use of magic didn't reflect her mentality. Gaela is young and skilled in both restoration -- restoring life -- and destruction -- destroying life. Her life, while ultimately quiet, is full of points of pain like her chronically ill mother, her father's death, and the fact she was arrested for [i]accidentally killing an abuser[/i]. I see a woman at a crossroads who is one bad day away from returning to her old destructive habits, only now with far more skill. It's like Anakin Skywalker, but with Jar Jar's steroid pumping cousin Jex as comedic (?) relief. Hell, I could even see Gaela secretly curious about the path to becoming a hagraven one day simply to unlock greater access to magic to prevent these misfortunes in the future. Again though, I'm saying this, but I also dig Gaela already. Anything more is just like a pinch of salt to taste -- not necessary, but interesting.

[@Dervish] Dat smile doh. Actually, Cedric strikes me as vaguely similar to Gaela. His road through life is understandable and feels real. The way he reacts to the world is consistent and ties well with the background you provided us. Truthfully, this reads quite well as the summary to a story. I do notice Cedric lacks much in the way of vulnerability, mentally or emotionally that is, but that seems in line with his history. Cedric was raised a hard man, one who lives to live and is accustomed to accepting hard truths. We see this when he leaves his father and when Ruddy passes away -- you mention him becoming somewhat out of it, but pass over quickly suggesting to me that while the pain was great, it did not define Cedric. My question would be what great ambition or challenge fuels Cedric? It says that he realizes he must move on in his life. I like the idea of a man grown seeking the next stage, but I'm curious if his Reachman roots will satisfy this need or if he is looking for a simple life. Then again, part of me sees a character like Cedric as an excellent preface to one like the Dragonborn. Cedric is an other belonging more to a people he does not know with the skills and yearning to do something that has yet to occur to him. In the past you've made it clear your feelings about Daedra, but gods, who if not this man is Hircine looking for?!

[@Leidenschaft] I am really into Brynn. Gritty, bandit dueling, a man seeking legend despite learning along the way how little value it holds -- it's interesting and just feels complete. I think that presents its own challenge, though. I wonder how you will move Brynn in this story, and if perhaps where others often seek growth for their characters, if perhaps this one might go another way (he is complete and confident already). I find that very interesting, personally, and look forward to seeing what you create. A part of me also wonders if the lyrical feeling I got from the CS suggests that this is all how Brynn views himself and if, a layer deeper, he is seeking another sort of meaning akin to his brother. It would be quite interesting if the two sought what the other had and crossed one another on opposing life-paths. I feel the need to apologize for how brief this review is. I've offered no deep suggestions or off-kilter critiques, but I believe this is in part due to your approach to characters. The way you craft these personalities, and Sevari too, feels familiar to me. What I mean to say is, I suspect you're in my blind spot!