[quote=@DarkwolfX37]
(Definitely italicise those thoughts. When reading through it, the "you" was jarring because I hadn't completely registered them as thoughts, but it makes more sense if I know that they're thoughts.)
They aren't supposed to be thoughts. The only reason I changed it to "you" was because you told me to. 
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It says "These thoughts flashed through my mind..." If they're not thoughts, then you have to change it back from you and make it all past tense instead of present tense.