[quote=@Rune_Alchemist]
Aha~

Alright, added the bit about Rauru in. Simple and easy enough motivation for her to be there~

As for her parents...their relationship is awkward at best. Added that in a little blurb under other~
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Thanks for adding those bits, it looks great to me now. I like your spell choice too, and if you want you could even make her a little more experienced with alchemy. Syrup and Maple were most famous as potion makers, I'm sure at least some of that got passed down in the training. Backstory is straightforward and leaves room to go pretty much anywhere with the character. I give it a firm noice out of noice. :golfclap

[quote=@Sho Minazuki]
[B]Magic:[/B]
[list][*] [b]Labrynna Firebrand L1 (Labrynna Fire Ring) [/b]- When activated, it wreathes whatever weapon he is wielding in flames, adding more damage, and a little extra range in the form of a stream of fire. If he obtains other elemental rings he can use different elemental or effect versions as well.
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Another great character. Did you draw that yourself? Nice touch with the Zora water symbol on the sword. You could add a bit about his actual physical features for the appearance if you want, the drawing is hella dope for sure but it would be nice to have some bits about his height and hair color and other juicy deets, you know? I mean just in case anyone's gotta describe him when he takes his helmet off and all that.

Only real problem I have with the sheet is that I'd rather him not start with a spell ring since he's a warrior character. That is a good idea for a spell ring though, he may acquire it later. I'll compromise on the fire effect; what if he can ignite his sword during the Dragon Spin Attack, but it only lasts for the duration of the attack? Then it would be more like a secret sword art than a conventional spell; there is precedent this for this in the series, as Link sometimes learns the Spin Attack and the Sword Beam in games where there isn't a conventional magic meter, even though these are magic-based attacks. The fire effect would, however, mean there would be a cooldown period between effective uses of the Dragon Spin Attack because he's using magic effects with no magic energy. If this were the case, you'd describe the Dragon Spin Attack in the Magic section and where you would normally put the ring name, you'd just put Sword Art. Like ~Dragon Spin Attack (Sword Art)~

Does that sound fair? Otherwise I really like the sheet. The tie-in with the brother in Holodrum is nice, and his standing in the Seashell Knights gives me easy opportunities to involve that faction with the party. Not to mention he's fuckin' cool and shit like that. So rad. I give it a fresh out of dope. :golfclap