I think you did pretty well here, we get the understanding she is a padawan so she wouldn't have the abilities a knight or master would. We also get the sense that she is a bit implosive -- hint hint this could be a foreshadowing of a path down to the dark. DUN DUN DUNNN. Lol. Anyway. We get a sense of character flaws too, which is good; and I'm sure they may show up more organically in play. So. Tossing Xeviiy up in dat bin right now.