[@lovely complex]
Mmkay, another super-long post from me. :lol 

For the most part, it went how I originally intended it with some certain dialogue changes. And the ending was a bit longer than I thought it was going to be. Also, depending on how you feel about things, I think your next post should be skipping to the next day. You'll see why I think this after you read it. 

Also, it's totally past 2am and I've been writing on and off since you posted, so five hours of on-and-off writing! Go me, I guess. :lol