[quote=@smarty0114]
[@Scarifar] So just a few things. A) She's too young to have fought in the war, seeing as how the war ended 13 years ago, placing her at 14 at the end of the war, which is a bit young even for a super soldier.  B) Her father not paying her ransom seems kind of strange, because even if he didn't like her, wouldn't that reflect rather poorly on his company. It might make more sense if the ransom wasn't really what her captors were after, and they kept her even after getting it. Other than those things, I think she's good :)
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Ok, I've made a couple changes to the backstory, mainly about the ransom and the time of release to after the war rather than during the war.