[quote=@Dead Cruiser]
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This is an issue that I've seen before. Essentially, the components of your character don't really synergize (blacksmithing, steel theme, inspiring leader, friendship wins). Not to say they contrast, but they don't really have much to do with each other. The end result isn't a [i]bad[/i] character, just an underwhelming one.

My advice is to bring outlying elements of your character in line with other elements. Say, turning him from into an inspiring leader into some kind of smith and/or warrior, or changing Steel Stream from being legendary smiths to heroic or inspiring leaders. Just as examples.
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Good advice, even experienced writers benefit from constructive criticism. I have something in mind, and will get in touch with [@vietmyke] to rework the sections with the Sand Kingdoms.