[quote=@AzazelSlayer] Name:The Insane One Shane Age:25 Birthday: Septemmber 21 Magic: Shane has the Power to Control The Shadows in the Following Way Shadow Ball - A Ball of Shadows that is unleashed. If it hits a object.. The object becomes Corrupted Shadow Vines - These Vines of Shadow Trap the user. For most they are hard to break out of as they grow stronger the more a person stuggles in them Shadow portal - This portal allows for one to travel to places they have been as well as allow lesser Shadow Demons join the battle. The portal only lasts a few seconds and then can not be re opened until the next night. Embrace the Shadows - The Shadows Completely Surround Aidoneus and create a barrier between him and his enemies. It can only last for a Few minutes. It is only in this form that he can summon more powerful Shadow Demons. Once out of this form he is weak and needs a few hours to regain his strength Magic Level: A History: Shane had a good childhood. He Had everything going for him. He was a son of a Local Noble a Rich family that can trace its history back decades. He was the heir to his fathers Fortunes and went to the finest schools. He even had found love with a woman Name Sasha. Everything was perfect for him until the day of there wedding. He went to the church early to talk to the priest. All was going well until the Wedding was about to begin and The priest told him that he could not perform the Marriage because the gods forbidden it. Shane went Basaltic hearing the news that he could not marry. Not only did he kill the priest.. But he killed his future wife's family as well as his own. For you see at this time in his life he had learned about the shadows. Although he did not know how to control them just yet. The Rage bought them out and he killed everyone. He was soon locked up in a prison where he was taught how to control the shadows from a fellow Inmate. Soon he would break free and unleash his new found power on anybody that stood in his way. Personality: Twisted from the Shadows, He sees things not in a logcial way but in a way that only makes sense to him alone. Most of the time he is Dark and Gloomy and believes the world is a place that needs to change. Randomly he will act out and do things that do not make sense like stand on top of a bar table and go back and worth while making fun of the bartender and getting into pointless fights. Guild and guild mark location: None Team Members: None Three Strengths: (Not just combat) 1. His Anger 2 His Determination 3. His insanity Three Weaknesses: (Make them Applicable) 1. He is Reckless and will do things without thinking 2. Love and anything connected to it ( Like getting a hug or a kiss ) 3. The Light ( He hates the light ) Greatest Love: Sasha Motivation: To bring back his greatest Love. That is his number one Motivation..To bring her back and to have a wedding Appearance: [img]http://vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/leagueoflegends/images/5/58/Guilt24CienPortrait.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20130504151601[/img] Additional Details: Shane is insane because he will do anything and hurt anyone to achieve his goal. even if the things he does not make any sense to anyone else. It makes sense to him and that is what counts [/quote] Okay. While it is a good CS, the number one rule generally known here is you do not God-mod another's character, unless you ask and come to an agreement. The shadow ball essentially does this. I do not like that move. Nor do I like the shadow vines-both moves are overpowered and do essentially god mod another's character. They leave no opportunity for escape, and a battle would be over in mere minutes. I am also disturbed by his greatest loves name. My character is named Sasha as well. But that is my problem XD Look, I find the CS interesting, but I can't let it pass with those two moves. You need a two out of three approval, and I don't see you getting any approval with the way those moves are right now. You need to either change them, or give them a good weakness before I will consider approving. I'm not trying to be mean, I am just trying to keep it fair for everyone.