[@Prince of Seraphs] Every time I read your critiques, I try to justify the things I'm doing in my head. Fortunately, you don't just point out the flaws, you say why the way they would be flaws, and I end up agreeing with you cause you're right.

•You're definitely right about "occurrences" as right now they are completely insignificant, and not only that, the way I was trying to introduce them just made my writing clunkier and clunkier.

•Heh. Sam is totally an exposition dump on two legs. His character is bland, for the reasons you stated: I didn't consider fleshing out his character since I really wanted to explore the world. I'll do better.

•Pyrokinetics was a bit too heavy handed, your right. Even if the word is Pyrokinesis, that was indeed a very poorly thought out sentence. People get the gist, no need to dump the exposition too heavily.

•I'll fix his notes

Thank I really can't thank you enough for the feedback. The fact that you took the time out to help me so directly is very altruistic, and I appreciate it so much. I just need a mini version of you that can improve my writing 24/7.