[@Prince of Seraphs] If you stay up a bit longer (Or eat breakfast next to your computer? Idk your timezone) I can present the next version. Also I do not find you tactless in the least, and I'd rather be told "This is what's wrong" then my SO's "Your so good at writing!" I appreciate compliments but they don't help me improve as much as criticism, and don't worry I will work on the character.