Okay, so I was wondering if someone could help me with rping. I want some feedback (gimmie your harshest feedback, I want to get better. I am no baby lol) on my rping since I dunno how good my rping posts are. 
 
Here is an example:
Austin was running through the forest when he heard several trees being torn from the roots behind him. He had a scared look because whatever was chasing him, wanted to kill him. Austin ran till he tripped over a vine which caused his leg to be stuck in the vines. He could see the monster coming closer, so he grabbed his knife before cutting the vines from his leg. Once they were cut, he hid behind a tree. The monster slowed down and looked around in the area before letting out a very loud high pitched scream. The monster looked like a cross between a hog and a very buff looking man. After the hog-man let out the scream, it left to see if it can find any other sort of food. Austin put his hand to his head and let out a very nervous sigh. He would wait there for a few seconds before pulling out his phone and dialing the number for the rescue team. "Hey, I can't talk for long but can you please, for the love of god, bring me back..I don't want to be here anymore..this place is not what it seems.." Austin said as his vision was starting to get blurry from how much stress he was under.
(All suggestions are welcome ^^ I also want to know what I need to work on)