[@Holy Soldier]

In agreement with [@Undine] on this one: Your Fatal Flaw has to be something that could cause your death - Hubris, Pride, Love, Greed, stuff like that. I think Pride would work well for your character; perhaps even ambition or greed.

Your personality needs a re-check too. I'm not seeing one bad thing in that entire paragraph; now, for a guy who leaves his mother and friends behind to achieve his own dreams, and also nearly beats a guy to death, I'd expect to see some negative traits in there. Anger issues, ambition again, stuff like that. No human is perfect, so I don't expect to see a perfect personality.


Also, the first sentence of your Appearance section: Inherited his father's "belt"? Is this a typo, or am I misunderstanding a slang term?