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<Snipped quote by Andreyich>

Speaking of which, and I realise you're ESL, could we have less of the 'he would' this and 'he would' that?

Look at others posts and see how they write, in English third-person writing this isn't really a valid form of writing it; this isn't a massive thing, nor a big criticism, just trying to help and make your writing smoother.
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Is this a criticism of the "he?" if it's about that, sorry I run out of pronouns... if it's a criticism about the "would" I can edit and make it nicer, if you like though I may switch tenses like that.