[quote=@Andreyich]
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Is this a criticism of the "he?" if it's about that, sorry I run out of pronouns... if it's a criticism about the "would" I can edit and make it nicer, if you like though I may switch tenses like that.  
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Neither.

An example, perhaps?

"John went forward and dropped own to the flor and did fifty press-ups and then ran away over the hills."

Compared to...

"John went forward, he would drop to the floor and he would do fifty press-ups, then he would run away over the hils."

You see?