[@Noodles]: Okay, gonna be a bit snarky here. Forgive me in advance, please.
If I've said it once, I've said it a thousand times.

Train.
Past.
[i][b]Midnight.[/b][/i]
Plus.
Child.
[i]Under.
Age.[/i]

Look, I know that cultural and societal norms are a tad different in Japan compared to most Western countries, but I'm still fairly certain that riding a train past midnight is still really dangerous without justification in either country (read: escort home by relatives); either change the age or change the justification for being on the train to something a bit less... I dunno, contrived? The name suggests at least one parent with Western origins, so... Yeah.

Also, I'm not seeing someone wear that sorta outfit coming back from anywhere other than a con in this day and age. I recommend swapping that out if you can't find good enough justification, taking into account everything I've said until this point.

Like, no lie, those are essentially the only issues I have with the form. It's fine otherwise, but those two points need to be addressed.